Humans reach this state of success by setting and accomplishing goals. A goal is a very broad task that can range anywhere from scoring in basketball to discovering the cure to cancer. I, like any other human, have a set of goals of which I pursue.
None of this needs to be included. This is what I think of as a "warm up exercise for writing." It is your reflection that should be edited out of the final draft. Let the essay begin with a bold statement of your goals.
No need to explain yourself this way: D
escribing all my goals would not fit into one paper so I have chosen my top three goals.Your goals are important enough to be the focus. Introduce them in this intro paragraph. Introduce the actual goals, not the notion of human goal setting, etc.
Here is something else we do not need to be told:
To succeed in any goal, one has to put forth their best effort.I am going to be honest. This essay does not describe goals. It is a reflective discussion, but it focuses on concepts that should not be the focus. Here is the only part I like:
With a solid Engineering program, classes overflowing with information, and a high job-placement rate, North Carolina State University will help me complete almost all my personal goals.--- this is where the essay really begins. It is important for you to read some recent articles about (what kind of?) engineering, see what is going on in the field, learn about recent events in the eng. department at NCSU, and write about specific goals related to your chosen field.
Sorry to be critical... but it is important to treat this like a serious exposition of your career outlook.. almost like a research paper about your current aspirations and a declaration of what you have learned, what you are learning, and what you have been reading, etc... what you INTEND for your time in college.