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Psychology is alive at Cornell/ Intellectual interests, their evolution..


0livegreen 5 / 11 4  
Dec 29, 2012   #1
College of Arts and Sciences:
Describe your intellectual interests, their evolution, and what makes them exciting to you. Tell us how you will utilize the academic programs in the College of Arts and Sciences to further explore your interests, intended major, or field of study.

One day, my father sat with me on the couch of his tiny apartment with a heavy book in his hand. At the time, I was only 10 and my attention was currently being held by flipping channels on his little TV. Finally, after failing to find something interesting, I glanced at what he was reading. It turned out to be a book used to interpret symbolism in dreams, and had sparked most of our conversation that day. Later on, I learned that books like this had arisen from one man's theory that dreams are the brain's method of revealing secrets about the subconscious. Fascinated, I ventured on to the Psychology sections of bookstores for years trying to understand people in a way that would the average person on the street wouldn't. As an adolescent, I was passionately involved in my college psychology class and am still very grateful to my psychology teacher for introducing me to the wonders of Carl Jung, Sigmund Freud and Watson. I could rant on about how amazing the fact that there are more connections in the brain than atoms in the universe is. The fact that the brain is so complex and misunderstood still in today's "modern" setting only attracts my interest even more. Psychology constantly demands the phrase, "why?" and the answer is at times subjective, meaning dynamic and alive. For me, psychology still lies in the fixed pages of books, but at Cornell, psychology could lie in discussions and debates, in research and science, very much alive, the way I know it can be.

I know it needs more, the limit is 500 and I'm at about 250. Any suggestions would be much appreciated!
DrS 1 / 24 5  
Dec 29, 2012   #2
Your essay is way too short.
HarvardAccept - / 57 24  
Dec 31, 2012   #4
Hi Vanessa,
First of all, it says intellectual interests which means that you have to not only mention psychology but something else.
You also need to relate it to the College of Arts and Sciences better.
Edit these into your essay and then I will look at your grammar and diction/syntax after I eat at Qdoba. C:

*Make a second version and post it. I promise I will edit it.
karatekid666 4 / 13 2  
Jan 2, 2013   #5
I agree with the previous poster who said that it is too short. You did not describe very much about what you will do to engage academically at Cornell. That is the 2nd half of the prompt. You will need to expand.

Also, I take exception to the statement that "there are more connections in the brain than there are atoms in the universe," because it is wholly inaccurate-- the opposite is true!


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