Puberty is one of the experiences that helped me as a person

Being on the age of exploration I may say that puberty is one of the experiences that helped me as a person. Puberty is a difficult part because this stage is where we practice self-reliance. We try to discover who we really are. This is the most captious time of every people. We can say everyone had experience this and may helped them as a person. Puberty is where we experience the difficulties and hardship in our lives. Puberty helped me to mature in my attitude and my personalities. It is not only puberty the stage of exploration we can say that it is the way of a distinct life. We learn different things like taking full responsibility to my actions. We can say that this is the days we need to act on ourselves and take things on our selves so we can be dependent. But this not makes us very dependent because we cannot live on our selves yet, we still need our parents to live.

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what should i add to make it more meaningful?

Hi Charlie, is this supposed to be a common app essay or something? You did not really offer us the topic or give us instructions for the review of your essay so I am not sure what it is that I am supposed to be looking for in your work. Would you mind giving me an idea by uploading the instructions or essay prompt as soon as possible? I would greatly appreciate it. Right now, the essay has a very generic feel to it that does not give much weight to the seriousness of puberty or your experiences. I can offer a better review and offer relevant suggestions once I find out what direction this essay is supposed to be headed in. I look forward to receiving the instructions soon :-)