"public drama performance" Notre Dame-time when you have surprised others or yourself

Tell us about a time when you have surprised others or yourself by doing something unexpected.

During my first year in high school, I participated in the school's public drama performance as a main actor. I was given multiple roles in the performance, but there is one role that I accepted with much reluctance-impersonating the opposite gender. Having invited my family ...

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Should I accept it? Impersonating the opposite gender in front of the public is a new challenge for me. I have already taking on multiple roles, and it would be difficult to multi-task. Knowing that my parents are very traditional, I was worried about what they would think after watching my performance? After much self reflection, I convinced myself that every challenge is a learning experience, and I should cherish every opportunity to enrich my high school life. I put aside all the stress and acted out this role to my best ability. The amount of laughter and applause that my impersonation brought to the audience was not expected. My parents and friend were amused by my radical transformation on the stage and many of them praised me for my professionalism. Overcoming the fear of breaking through my comfort zone allowed me to develop my true potential to the fullest.

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However, I overcame this mental barrier and acted out the roles in my best ability.- How did you overcome the barrier? I think you should elaborate on this.

My parents and friend were shocked by my radical transformation on the stage and most of them praised me for my professionalism.- Did your parents not know what you were playing, did they mock you, or what? There's not a lot details about what you had to overcome.

I think you should rewrite this. There's not much that says anything about you as a person.

I have done some changes to the 1st post, hope this one is slightly better.

Please give me your precious comments on how to improve it further. Appreciate if you can identify the grammatical errors. Thank you for anyone who spare me your precious time.

I have already taking taken on ...

Use a comma for the compound sentence:
My parents and friends were amused by my radical transformation on the stage, and many of them praised me for my professionalism.

I like the word enabled instead of allowed: Overcoming the fear of breaking through my comfort zone allowed enabled me to develop my true potential to the fullest.

You wrote this well! I think it was good to start it with that question, "Should I...?"

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