Hi Michelle, I just clicked over to your essay because I wanted to try to help you after I saw the great help you gave someone else -- when you mentioned the importance of giving no-nonsense, concrete explanations in the SOP. That was some great advice.
From early adolescence, I refuted the lull of the mainstream to seek a deeper education and diversified intellect, furthering a future devoted to understanding the human mind and utilizing literary expression.
This makes me ask, "Using lit expression for what?'
How about this:
From early adolescence, I
refuted rejected the lull of the mainstream in favor of seeking
a deeper education and diversified intellect -- utilizing literary expression and psychology to understand the human mind.
And I feel that this intro needs another sentence to plainly state what you are all about. What is the key word or term that expresses your THEME for this academic venture?
You are missing a word here, I think, but actually I would like to just simplify...
My own pivotal psychotherapy work as patient continues to support my well-being and development as an ambitious individual, and I hope
in rewarding profession to do at least this much for others.
Anyway, I can't offer much help because it is already so well written!