Some kids spend their afternoons studying and preparing for the unit exam the next day. Focused on school and nothing else, not a problem in the world. This was not me in ninth grade, I did not care about school, and I did not consider my future at all. I met a certain group of unruly kids who wanted nothing more than to do as they pleased. For some reason I believed as if this was all right, my life spiraled downwards. Partying, drinking and cussing, I knew this was not me. As I reviewed my G.P.A. I realized it was nothing more than terrible I came to my senses and realized changed was needed and I was full of hope. I witnessed my parents discuss the happenings of their work unions. I watched as they would complain about how the boss was a fat cat and would not focus on the small "underdogs". I noticed how my mother's boss would cut her routes and her pay this would affect her dearly. Witnessing these situations made me consider being an elected official, a union organizer, or an attorney. I believed that joining the Law and Government magnet would help me achieve these goals. I did not to live my life as a gardener or as a grease monkey; I wanted to wear a suit everyday. I noticed the resources I have had and started to take advantage of them.
I on looked as my fellow peers get into AP and honors classes I stayed down in the regular classes where the teacher's role was pretty much a babysitter. I could not deal with this anymore; I had to get on the right track. It was the end of tenth grade when the baseball team had no coach, weeks later my law teacher volunteered to coach the team again. Not only was he a law teacher but also an attorney. As I consulted my dilemmas with him, he saw a light in me that no other teacher saw. He recommended I join Speech and Debate and Mock Trial and I was not sure at first, was I smart enough? Could I handle it? I pondered the idea through my head for a few months then I finally got the guts to join.
After all this hype I had a new mindset on school, I was ambitious for the first time. I had a new outlook on school. These clubs have changed me for the better and gave me an incentive to learn more and actually achieve things in life. In mock trial, we would have cases in which students would portray the roles in a court. In the beginning teachers would not even consider me for an audience member but now I was the attorney in the cases. I was fed up with being in the lower classes and I wanted a challenge. All my friends earned top-notch G.P.A s while mine was everything but spectacular. I was determined to raise it as much as possible. I pondered on and on what admission counselors would think when they would see my poor transcript, just a stupid kid or student that messed up and tries hard to achieve his goals. I did not wanted to be another minority living under the ranks, I look back on my past and I wish I could change the things I did but nothing can reverse time (not even a flux capacitor!) all I can do now is look forward and push myself to be in top classes and get the grades I want so badly.
Good morning :)
Mechanically, some suggestions:
"Partying, drinking, and cussing; I knew this was not me."
"underdogs. "
"I on looked as my fellow peers get into...
This should be "I looked on" and "got" instead of "get" so that you stay in the same tense.
In regards to content, I'm not sure if this is a good fit or not because you didn't include the prompt in your question. Overall, it looks well organized and it flows smoothly. Your conclusion doesn't introduce any new information, and your body sticks to the topic of your introduction.
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