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Queen's Commerce: Describe the most important constructive criticism you have received


Describe the most important constructive criticism you have received. How did you respond and what did you learn?
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I am worried my response doesn't flow as well as it should, and I am not demonstrating that I learned something from my criticism. Additionally, I am 20 words over...is there anything less relevant I could cut out?

many tasks at once



I am part of the events committee in my band's leadership executive, consisting of eight Grade 11 and 12 students. Our first project was to plan a roller skating event. Since I was the only new Grade 12 member, I felt pressure to prove that I was a valuable contributor. As a result, I tried to take on as many tasks as possible. I created informational posters, sold tickets, and looked after admissions logistics. During a group meeting discussing event check-in, I volunteered to take charge. Two others offered to help, but I declined their offer, telling them I already established a plan for the task. My another Grade 12 confronted me, telling me that I needed to be more inclusive in terms of sharing the tasks. I was not working like I was part of the team, as I was taking on initiatives without consulting with the group first.

After the meeting, I felt conflicted. I thought I was demonstrating my commitment to the group, but instead, I was being too domineering. My team member's criticism made me reflect on my role as a team member. While taking control of tasks allowed me to contribute my own ideas, it didn't allow for collaboration between me and my other team members.

At the following meeting discussing promotions, I directly asked the members if there were tasks that interested them. As each member communicated their ideas, I realized our diversity in skills and perspectives could maximize our outreach to the students. We utilized everyone's ideas, advertising through various mediums such as Snapchat, posters, and skits.

Currently, I remain consistent in ensuring each member has an opportunity to express their opinions and contribute to our projects. I also make an effort to provide an opportunity for my other group members to help out. Through this experience, I learned that being an active listener provides a chance for the best ideas to be shared.

@jlee99
Hi, jessica.
I rewrite your essay.
Of course, I am not good at writing a essay, I just want you to give some idea.
Just reference below.
Good luck.

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..., consisting of eight students who are in Grade 11 and 12.
At that time, since I was the only new Grade 12 member, I felt pressure ...
Thus, As a result, I tried to take ...
However, a problem occrued. During a group meeting discussing event check-in, I just volunteered to take charge the event alone, declining two others offered to help,, but I declined their offer, telling them since I already established ...

Unfortunately, My another peer Grade 12 confronted me, ...
It means that I was not working like I was as part of the team,...
I felt conflict, because that was exctly opposite my intend. However, I could realized what is the most meaningful within group activites.

After the meeting, I felt conflicted. I thought (...) between me and my other team members.

At the following meeting discussing promotions, After that, I started to ask directly asked the members opinion if there were tasks ...
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