Although racism does not exist today like it used to, the lingering effects are still noticed
would you prefer to say "Although racism is not as prominent as it used to be"?
also, i would use "evident" instead of "noticed" :)
Many school districts are not diverse and students are surrounded by classmates of their own race, which naturally makes them have a biased bias against other races or a tentativeness tendency to associate with them.
school districts to become more diverse so kids could that children can learn in this a healthy, real life environment.
Ever since I started school my family and I have lived in Rockwall County, a predominantly white and well off community
is well off a sort of slang? not sure, but you can use "wealthy" instead if you'd like
however there are still people who intentionally or unconsciously are racist.
i would say "exhibit racism" instead of "are racist"
Society has made efforts to halt alleviate the effect of racism, and as a nation most people would say we have made significant progress such as Barack Obama being elected as the first African American president. However, the election of Barack Obama really has not led to progress in terms of racism
I would also split this sentence into two, putting a period after the word progress and start the other idea saying "an example of this..."
There have been countless jokes around our school insulting President Obama because he is an African American and many white people refused to vote for him for this reason alone solely for this reason.
Also, instead of using "around our school" i would have preferred to say "circulating in our school community" what do you think?
The election appeared to have as much to with race as with the person the candidates were
<< not sure what this sentence is saying
Attending the University of Texas in Austin would throw me into the university life.
... try to rephrase this sentence without the use of the phrase "throw me into"
As I have witnessed the people in Austin can be very crazy . The present world is crazy though and our generation needs to be ready to cope with it.
.. What exactly do you mean by 'crazy'? .. unconventional? thoughtless? unpredictable? i'm not sure. you should try to use a more specific and sophisticated word :)
Overall, nice effort for a first draft!
~All the best~