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Culture is not limited to a specific definition but pattern can familiarize the definition of culture. Culture consists of more mental characteristics in my opinion. The diversity we see further named as culture is because of nothing but diversity in the way people think. Culture includes way of thinking, life and worship. I come from a country that Great the Cyrus was the king of, a king who organized the first cylinder of human rights. I come from a country that Arabs and Turks once invaded, but people did not give up their language, their personality. Culture is language; it makes us who we are and then enables us to express ourselves.
My mother tongue is Persian, although I can read Arabic and speak English. I play Persian music, although I am pretty familiar with classical music as well. I have always loved the ancient culture of Iran and that is a bridge between past and present. I have scrutinized historical books and events of ancient Iran. Therefore, to awaken old traditions and celebrations I introduced some to my high school friends, the community that I could influence. All the students appreciated the old traditions and they were planning to celebrate them again next year!
The economy mostly depended on agriculture in past. As farmers' lives were dependent on nature, they always used parts of nature as symbols of success. Today, we grow wheat each year as a symbol of growth, a symbol of productivity. In Nowruz, Iranians make a wish and will endeavor till the next year to achieve their goal. Parents and grandparents give young members of family gifts so this is also a temptation for the youth to join the celebration and let the family reunite once more.
What I hope to contribute to the University of Washington at the beginning, and the world in the end is the celebration of Nowruz. So, families would find a reason to gather, people would have a chance to grow everything from the beginning and everyone would make a wish for a better life.
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Nowruz is not just a celebration. Noruwz encompasses different intellectual and philosophical concepts. It is the celebration of nature through which people praise, and worship God for all his blessings. The Nowruz culture asks people to think about their deeds over a year and it teaches them how to make their thoughts new. Nowruz also brings the culture of forgiveness and kindness to people as it stands in the basis of love. Nowruz reminds us about how worthy elderly are and gives young people lessons on how to behave to older individuals. I want to contribute these valuable concepts to the University of Washington by introducing the culture of Nowruz.
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