Hi guys, I am a college sophomore and I am planning to transfer into an engineering program, an this my essay. It would be very helpful for me if u could have a look and post some comments. Thank you!
Please provide a statement that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve. (250-650 words)
When I was planning to come to study in the United States I was asked complete an ESL program, before I can be considered as a full-time student, since English is neither my first nor my second language. The English placement test that was meant to determine which level of English I would be enrolled in ended up showing that my English skills were good enough to be a full-time student and consequently exempted me from the ESL program. Being exempted of ESL course was good news for me because it allowed me to save time and money. On the other hand I was somehow forced to stay at Dean College even though there is not any engineering program offered.
When I look back at the three semesters that I have spent at Dean College, I realize that although my journey at Dean started as a choice by default, it made me a better student, and also a better person. My calculus courses taught me to be focused, and my English essays made me a better writer and taught me to work hard to achieve my goal even if that meant staying up until 3 a.m. Campus life helped me to feel comfortable with people of different backgrounds; my untidy roommate taught me tolerance. I left my first home seeking a better education, and now I am leaving my second home, Dean, for an engineering program. I have been "prepared for what's next" and I am now ready to move on something bigger, something more challenging. I am ready to move to an engineering program.
As far as I can remember I have always been interested in technology, from simple FM radios to engines to telephones. I did not know it when I was younger, but I was interested in any devices that produce or use electrical energy. During the fall 2007, I received a 30 gigabyte iPod; from that moment the compact disc player that I used to brag to my friends became obsolete. I had no longer any reasons to carry around a stack of compact discs. The 30 gigabyte of internal memory could store up to 7,500 songs and the manipulation became easier with "touch control"; I was mesmerized. That's the point when my interest in technology grew into the dream to become an engineer. I started to work toward my future career in engineering, when I was in high school. I took some courses in the technology field; among them: electrical drawings, electrical machines, and some basic electronics.
The author and entrepreneur Jim Rohn once said, "get around people who have something of value to share with you. Their impact will continue to have a significant effect on your life long they have departed". Asides from being able to pursue my dream major, transferring to a bigger and more active university will give me the opportunity to find more people who share the same interest with me and better chances to participate in major scientific research.,
As a future engineer, my dream is to work on something that is bigger and more important than me, something that will last longer than the duration of my life. I don't know yet what it will be nor when it will happen but I know that the first step is transferring into the engineering program at a large, well-respected university. I know that as an individual I can do something good, but if I work with a team I am sure that we can do great things, because I believe that collaborative efforts can yield success. Thus I will benefit from studying in a challenging environment with hardworking peers. Plus studying in a research university will give me the opportunity to meet some of my future business partners or colleagues.
Hello,
This essay is good but you really need to focus it a bit more. Since you will be a transfer student, you really do not have the luxury of an exploratory first year as a freshman student would. Because of this, you need to hit the ground running if you want to have any hopes of graduating on time. Statements like "I don't know yet what it will be nor when it will happen but I know that the first step is transferring into the engineering program at a large, well-respected university," will scare the adcom at a major university where engineering seats are at a premium. My suggestion to you is to possible talk about one or two specific areas of engineering that you might be interested in instead of saying engineering in general which only shows the admissions committee that you are not as focused as they might want you to be. - Admissions Advice Online
Hope this helps.
When I was planning to come to study in the United States I was asked to complete an ESL program, before I can be considered as a full-time student, since English is neither my first nor my second language.
Being not a native English speaker, I was requested to complete an ESL program while I was planning to apply to study in the USA to be qualified as a full-time student.The English placement test that was meant to determine which level of English I would be enrolled in ended up showing that my English skills were good enough to be a full-time student and consequently exempted me from the ESL program.
However, I performed extremely well at the English placement test that was held to assess the students' English literacy levels and therefore I managed get an exemption from the ESL program.Being exempted of ESL course was good news for me because it allowed me to save time and money.
It was such good news that saved both my time and money.