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"real, tangible, and alive - Science!" Cornell Arts and Sciences interests essay


rjctcollege1 2 / 10  
Dec 26, 2009   #1
Describe your intellectual interests, their evolution, and what makes them exciting to you. Tell us how you will utilize the academic programs in the College of Arts and Sciences to further explore your interests, intended major, or field of study.

"What's your favorite subject?" This was a popular question among us fifth graders at the time, and without a moment's hesitation, I would blurt out "Science!" Why? Because being a simple-minded fifth grader, it was the one subject where I didn't have to force my eyes open as my butt went numb sitting through another boring math lesson on fractions, or wonder how the knowledge of the French and Indian War would help me in the future. Science was real, tangible, and alive.

Not much has changed in the past seven years. My love for science has only grown. What started out as simple experiments to keep the students awake in fifth grade such as observing plants flowered into a deep understanding of science and the laboratory imitations such as calculating projectile motion of a hot wheels car and predicting chemical reactions. If someone were to ask me what my favorite subject was again, I would without a moment's hesitation blurt out "science!" This love has compelled me to take the most rigorous courses in science offered. Even though there are numerous sciences, such as biology, physics, and chemistry, each and every one of them has given me a thorough understanding of how this world works-how I am sitting in this chair writing this essay instead of floating in the air, how this table is held together through chemical and covalent bonds, and how I am breathing and typing this essay.

But this knowledge is only the genesis of greater understanding. I have yet to fully explore the crevices of each science and can not determine a major on solely my knowledge now. Some may view that being "undecided" would be a disadvantage. But for each subject that I delve into, it opens up a whole of world of possibilities and questions. Learning about biology opened the door of chemistry. Learning about chemistry, I then found a curiosity for physics and its functions. Learning about physics then gave me a deeper understanding of calculus and its complications. Choosing a major with only the knowledge from one or two classes during high school on each specific subject, it would close off countless possibilities that I have yet to discover. That is why even though I want to enter Cornell college of Arts and Sciences, I have yet to pick a specific major and want to enter as undecided. And only at Cornell college of Arts and Sciences can I truly develop a broader spectrum of knowledge on the sciences with renowned research institutes. One that interest me in particular is the Weill Institute for Cell and Molecular Biology, where I will be able to experience what I am learning hands-on in hopes to find advancements in the medical and technological field. And with the wealth of programs and courses at Cornell, I will be one step closer to the path of discovering what I truly want to spend the rest of my life doing.
pmurray62 8 / 26  
Dec 26, 2009   #2
Because being a simple-minded fifth grader, it was the one subject where I didn't have to force my eyes to stay open as my butt went numb sitting through another boring math lesson on fractions, or wonder how the"knowing about?" knowledge of the French and Indian War would help me in the future. Science was real, tangible, and alive.

Not much has changed in the past seven years. My love for science has only grown. So there has been change? What started out as simple experiments to keep the students awake in fifth gradeI think you need to have some kind of division between these two phrases such as observing plants flowered into a deep understanding of science and the laboratory imitations such as calculating projectile motion of a hot wheels car and predicting chemical reactions. If someone were to ask me what my favorite subject was again, I would without a moment's hesitation blurt out "science!" Repetitive?
OP rjctcollege1 2 / 10  
Dec 27, 2009   #3
ok thank you! anything else?
pmurray62 8 / 26  
Dec 27, 2009   #4
Katie--You're a solid writer. I enjoyed your essay, mainly because I haven't read anyone's essay about entering college undecided yet. I think it's an interesting spin on things. Do you think there's anything you could add to this, though, that would bring it just a little bit "over the bar"? Besides that, you didn't have any major errors in grammar, structure, punctuation, or form. I liked your essay. Try some additions you think might push your essay a little further--"over the bar," as I said before.

I know you're probably busy, but if you get a chance, could you read my essay?

Thanks, Katie!
OP rjctcollege1 2 / 10  
Dec 28, 2009   #5
Thank you soo much!
Yeah Ill be happy to look at your essay!
anyone else got critiques for me?
I would be happy to return the favor.
spacerelay 3 / 19  
Dec 28, 2009   #6
Hello!

I realllly love your beginning!

You really describe your pasion for science.

Though you should change a couple of things:

I have yet to fully explore the crevices of each field of science and can one word (cannot) not determine a major on solelybased solely on what I know now.

But this knowledge is only the genesis of greater understanding. I have yet to fully explore the crevices of each field of science and can not determine a major that is based solely on my knowledge now.

Anyways this is great and i hope you get in!

PS> can you edit mine??
twizzlestraw 12 / 95  
Dec 28, 2009   #7
Cute hook! I like you're essay, but you could always go add more nuance and really illustrate the beauty and captivation you feel for science...But that's not really necessary.

I do think it would be a nice touch to end your essay with:

If someone were to ask me what my favorite subject was again, I would without a moment's hesitation blurt out "science!"

That way you are referring back to the introduction, and giving your essay a clean finish.

Would you mind reading mine? Thanks!


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