But out of the three none could illume ever more robust in my life than Vires and Artes displaying Mores.
This seems to mean that nothing could be more virtuous than someone demonstrating morality through strength and art? But to "illume robust" does not seem to make sense.
And if the indigent use these words, they are a liar.. like Clinton?
who' s whose
Congratulations on being a word artist. You are one of those wordsmiths who can appreciate good rhythm and imagery in writing. There are some lessons to be learned along the way, and one of them is a lesson about structure. Good writers hate hearing about structure, because they just want to let that sacred content flow from wherever it flows from, but the trick is like this:
Let it flow onto the screen, as you did, but then go back and add sentences that artfully clarify.
Go back and add sentences that artfully explain ambiguous terms (for example, how are you using he word "allude" here?)
Add sentences of clarification, and you will have a good balance of abstraction and clarity. If you use words and phrases that are subject to varying interpretation, you always will lose the reader's attention.
For example, after that first sentence of the essay, I am waiting for you to explain the three relationships. Instead of explaining them, you hit me with another thing I don't know how to interpret: " the indigent who ever stated such words is as much a liar as Bill Clinton.:---At this point, i am not sure what to make of the 3 relationships from the first sentence, and then I am also waiting to find out the significance of this mention of Clinton.
See, the writing has to be tight in order to create a powerful experience for the reader. Google this proprioceptive writing
Then, compare PW with writing that takes the reader on an intense trip. The intense trip is only possible when the abstract is balanced against the concrete and only when readers are able to feel confident that they are interpreting each line correctly.
And you can't leave any loose ends, like mentioning Clinton as a random example of a liar and then never building on that. For intense writing, proceed as though you are stacking sentences carefully on top of one another, painstakingly guiding the reader's thought process so that she goes deeper into thought with every sentence.