What else should I talk about in reasons for transferring? I would be glad to look at your essay.
I think the most important thing is to always describe a well developed plan with a lot of goals, deadlines, and details. That is what I often tell people. That is what makes the AO reader stop a moment and say, Oh, this kid really is inspirational with his ambition and determination!
I began to gaze at the ceiling. I only wanted to become one thing: an engineer. I wanted to make the world a better place.---I made a small adjustment here.
Capitalize Spanish.
Try to use paragraphs so that the reader can understand each of your ideas easily.
Here are some sentences that can be cut if you still need to cut some:
Since kindergarden my mother emphasized higher education. I am the older of two siblings, and my mother told me to set an example for my other two siblings.
University of Maryland has been my dream school for me since I was a child. Attending UMD will mean the world to me because I can pave my future, by getting into one of the best universities in the nation. I attended high school at Springbrook High School, and a very active student. This content is good, too, but if anything needs to be cut I think this stuff is expendable.
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