"This is what we made everyday?" Holding my iPad, Chan asked curiously.
Is this a question that chan is asking you? if so, maybe you should express it diffrently because it has a diffrent effect if it were in person than for a reader. so put " is this what we made everyday? ....or it it is a statement eliminate the question mark...it is quite confusingI could not imagine one sticking labels for ten hours a day; I could not imagine one producing but never see the products.
This is technically ok...but it flow if you replaced the semi colon with ", and"
"There are more than reported." Chan whispered when I asked about the jumped workers
remove the period after reported and put comma. Also, as a reader I might not know what foxxcon suicides were, so by saying "jumped workers," tells me nothing jumped from what? how about ..."Chan whispered when I asked about the workers who jumped to their deaths."
Am I also a victim of conservative and complacency
Hope I helped when is this due?