1.If you were given a $5,000 grant to study a topic, what would you choose to research and why?
Growing up, I never realized that I was being deprived of a spectacular conception. My family, like millions of other families in Bangladesh, was lacking one of the necessities of life: technology. (Is it safe to say technology is a necessity?) We stepped on the soil of America five years ago, eager to take advantage of the phenomenal possibilities. Within days after arriving here, I was astonished by the impact of technology on the American lifestyle. It seemed to me technology accomplished everything expeditiously.
At Notre Dame, I would want to research the obstacles that impede growth of technology in third-world nations. The unfortunate truth is that the impoverished people in the third-world nations have the skills but they lack the resources. I want to scrutinize and analyze the causes of a lack of technology or this phenomenon(Which one should I pick?) such as poverty and political corruption. (How can I phrase this sentence better?) My ambition is to ensure that the people in third-world nations can easily have access to the marvelous idea we call technology.
2.You have 150 words. Take a risk.
Language is one of the most enriching aspects of my life. As a child, I learned the Bengali, Arabic, and English alphabets - 104 letters in all. Learning to read and write three languages concurrently was overwhelming, especially for someone who did not speak two of the three. I was not only drawn to the scripts of my native language Bengali, but to those of Arabic and English as well. On my way to America through Dubai and Amsterdam, I realized the true importance of language in an increasingly diverse world. In Dubai, I was able to communicate vaguely in Arabic, but in Amsterdam, I was baffled as I spoke no Dutch and my heavily accented English was completely incoherent. After this experience, I aspired to learn more languages. I taught myself Hindi by watching Bollywood movies. I took a course on Hebrew this summer. And, I completed two years of French at school. আমি সত্যিই ভাষা ভালোবাসি - I really love languages.
(Do you think the Bengali script will show up on the common app? I think it only recognize the plain text. If that's the case, can you suggest an alternative ending?)
Also, I somehow want to say why I like learning languages. Because it allows me to communicate with a whole new set of people and also enjoy new films or music. But, I need to take some off, what can I take off?
^Does this essay really fit this prompt or does it raise an eyebrow? It was written for another topic. I really don't have the time to write a completely new essay. What do you think? Can it make it through?
Thank you so much in advance!
I will try to help :)
You have 150 words. Take a risk.
As a child, I learned the Bengali, Arabic, and English alphabets - 104 letters in all. Awesome! Play that up if you can. 104 letter in all? I am confused by that- be more specific.
I was not only drawn to the scripts of my native language Bengali, but to those of Arabic and English as well. You were drawn to them? I wonder if you were self taught, or were you encouraged to seek education in these subjects? Are you a natural at languages, or is the subject something that you worked hard to master?
On my way to America through Dubai and Amsterdam, I realized the true importance of language in an increasingly diverse world. In Dubai, I was able to communicate vaguely in Arabic, but in Amsterdam, I was baffled as I spoke no Dutch and my heavily accented English was completely incoherent. Maybe you could shorten this part, its a little distracting to the rest of the essay. Speak of Dubai and Amsterdam briefly, them move on, remember the purpose is to write while taking a risk.
I really love languages. (Is that what you are saying in arabic?) i am not sure if that will show up, but its worth a shot. It is a very simple phrase though. With your paper, i think the college kind of wants you to go out on a limb- so try to make it more interesting, a perfect reflection of your personality. This is a tough paper to write, you have done nicely, these are just some suggestions, should you choose to improve on this essay. Best of luck!
