Tell us what makes Stanford a good place for you.
Every time I see my extended family, I'm bombarded with questions about college. "Where are you going? What are you going to study?" The first answer is always the same: "I'm hoping for Stanford." The following "why" is not as easy to answer. I talk about Stanford's reputation for rigorous academics, the countless opportunities offered to students, or the proximity to larger urban locales. Invariably, I mention the warm weather, which helps my nerve disorder (I'm sensitive to cold). What I don't mention is the general feeling I get from Stanford. I know that I can feel safe, intellectually challenged, and welcome. Stanford is an environment in which I can achieve my best; the obvious passion that teachers and students have for their work fosters inspiration and success.
My answer to the second question is usually "I'm not sure." I have so many interests, from language to astronomy to psychology. I know that I have options at Stanford. I can take "Celluloid America: Explorations in Film and History" and "Energy and the Environment on the Back of an Envelope." At Stanford, I will be able to find my true calling while indulging my other interests. When I find my passion, I know that there will be a community of Stanford students like me to share it with. If I could say all of this when people ask "Why Stanford?" they would understand.
General thoughts, anything I could improve? Thanks!
Impressive essay! But I would get rid of "The following 'why' is not as easy to answer" and "If I could say all of this when people ask 'Why Stanford?' they would understand." I feel like they only detract from the essay.
an environment where I can achieve my best
Does it work if I change it like this?
The first answer is always the same: "I'm hoping for Stanford." When they ask why, I talk about Stanford's reputation for rigorous academics, the countless opportunities offered to students, or the proximity to larger urban locales.
I guess this answer is acceptable. It is better than the first.
Other than that, this is a great response. If you still have words available, perhaps you should add another specific tidbit about Stanford... ;)
Sure, that works.
this is really good. you were clear and concise about your reasons for wanting to go to stanford, and it looks like you know a lot about the university. good job!
could you please take a look at my supplement for syracuse? thank you!!
*while indulging in my other interests?