RISD: (200-400 words)
Is there something you love, have to do, can't stop thinking about? Write about a personal passion or obsession other than visual art or design (200-400 words)
Do I have a personal passion or obsession for something OTHER than visual art or design? Well, taking the question to mean that I should describe an obsession other than the major I would study in Rhode Island's School of Design, I will not be talking about my passion for architecture, but rather, other things such as: an obsession for my boyfriend with a six pack who brightens my world with his stunning looks, an addiction to shopping, spending thousands without a millisecond of hesitation, my excessive amount of traveling, enough to fill two passports, a constant reminiscence of my RISD college experience, or an unshameful collection of all my accomplishments as an architect. I ...
please help. its not finished, but is it too confusing. i wanted to make sure i was in the right path before i continued
okay so heres another version to the question
I am a dreamer. No I am not the one who admires the Abercrombie billboards that stand in the city and imagine a perfect man with a glowing six pack, or one who walks by the stores of New York City and is fascinated by the sparkling Chanel purses. No, I am more that the majority who gets lost in these superficial and material goods. Rather, I get lost in the paradises created in the movies and dramas I have watched since childhood. I did not understand the meaning of "impossible" then and when I saw the life of colorful and fun-loving toys (Toy Story) and experienced the adventures of an honest puppet (Pinocchio), I wondered what I could do in the future. As I matured, I began to watch many drama series and many of my moral concepts began to form. However, I also began to see these lowly and poor workers rise to the top and thought of how miracles work. Eventually, I would see one of my favorite dramas and admire the astounding buildings and houses that are displayed. This would inspire me to even create a replica of this dream home in the summer of 9th grade. In addition, movies constantly bombarded my attention, and when I experienced the world of limbo that Cobb created in the movie Inception, I wondered that maybe I could construct this fantasy world, possibly, in the real world, a kind of world for my family and I to grow old in. Just as Brian Littrell believed, "Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars." So as I continue this hobby of watching endless amounts of movies and dramas, I am continually motivated to reach my goals.
which one should i use?
I am a dreamer. ----This is a cliche, so it makes the reader yawn.
No, I am not...
No , I am more that than the...
I think doing this as all one long paragraph makes it confusing... Use paragraph breaks.
Also, the reference to the kind of dreamer you are not makes it confusing.I think you should get to the point more quickly. Also, I think you can make it so that this is about more than just watching films. You can cite some recent articles about cinema and maybe even make a connection between it and your visual art and design interests.
But wait a minute... is this considered visual art? Seems like it should be.
Most importantly, I think you should get rid of that first line, because it is really a cliche and unworthy of your great observations here.
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