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'Rock-n-Roll / Smith college / Women's World 9-Ball' - short answers to revise


lucy123 5 / 9 2  
Nov 7, 2012   #1
1.Applying to college can be serious business; yet we're eager to get to know you in a less formal way. Have fun answering the following question: If you had a theme song - a piece of music that describes you best - what would it be and why? Please include the name of the song and the artist. (Limit response to 150 words)

I Love Rock-n-Roll is the piece of song that can describe me best and its artist is Joan Jett .Not only because I really love rock and roll but also I have become more like this song since the first time I heard it. After accidentally listening to this song, I felt the passion and challenge lingered in my mind. The rhythm, the beat and the melody excited me. Everytime I hear the different feelings from the song. It conveys the love and passion, which are my attitudes toward life; It expresses confidence, which I always have on the dancing stage and running track. The characteristic of powerful and enthusiastic that this song has reflects what the person I am. Nearly everyone who listen to it can hardly forget it and also its popularity lasts for long time. Just like me, impressive and easy to get along with.

2. How did you first learn of Smith College and why are you applying? (Limit response to 100 words.)

Having listened to the experience of my alumnae who had already entered in the Smith college, I was enchanted. I love the classic construction built by reddish brown brick. I love the plural college with different background students who are liberal and smart. I love the traditional house event and the strong sense of belonging. And I love the rigor but attractive courses. What I care most is the warmth I felt when the alumnae told me living in smith college is never foreign to her because there will always be someone to help her whenever she has problem. I love this feeling of being at home from which though , I am living far away.

I wish next year the above things I love will come true.

3. Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).
International applicants

I was fortunate to get a chance to be the volunteer in the Women's World 9-Ball Championship. Because two things I love would have done---Watching games and helping people. First day, I met all the volunteer friends and started our works. We arranged chairs and tables for the open ceremony site and then dresses up as the ritual girls to welcome the 9-ball players. After that, the games started. I was assigned to the main stadium, solving people's problems and answering the their questions. Though so tired I felt, I was happy and fulfilled for helping others. Next day, my work changed to the players rest room. I got to know many famous players there, not only to serve them but also to take the advantages of English and Japanese that I learnt to talk with them about the exciting games, the countries they from and so on. After the quarter final, every player had to attend the news release, but there was no translator for foreign players. Then I volunteered to be. Thanks to the perivious talking with some players, I wasn't feel nervous when I faced so much reporters. This activity inspired me to help more people and also gave me confidence.
linting2012 10 / 78 18  
Nov 7, 2012   #2
My English isn't perfect so I can only find some very obvious mistakes. Here are some for the small volunteering essay

answering the their questions

I would revise this

nd the news release

I would say the "Press" release


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