Hi David, here's my take on your essay;
- My family
environment played a major role
- in helping me become who I am
currentlytoday ( I believe this is a more appropriate word ) . \
- and do
my utmostthe best I can , especially at hard times.
- Whether I was having a hard time
with ain class
- or I
was coming home thinking about quitting
- me to
my trueunleash my potential.
attemptconquer it with the correctright mind-set.
always over-preparing myself forbeing always ready to almost anything
There you have it David, I hope the above corrections are helpful towards your revision.
Overall, you have the idea of how to approach the prompt, however, this did not transpire in the essay, therefore a little more practice is needed. I wish to review the revised essay soon. Keep writing!