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'I am a Romantic' - Stanford Letter to Future Roommate


Armaan M 2 / 16  
Dec 20, 2011   #1
Dear equally qualified intellectual,
Before I go any further, I would like to extend my congratulations. We were accepted into Stanford!
As I stare at this task, I contemplate the best way for me to infuse myself into each and every word of this note. I could tell you about my love for golf, tennis or even my avid passion for boxing. But you will quickly discover these aspects of my character as we tee off on the first hole of Stanford Golf Course.

I must somehow capture the essence of myself in a single word. Simply put, I am a romantic. No, I won't serenade you with a violin as you walk into our dorm; nor will I hide a bag of roses above our door such that it will rain flowers when someone enters. I am no Tom Sawyer. But I do believe that true beauty occurs when art and science intertwine. You will find that I love to play the alto saxophone between studying for molecular biology exams. I am also a wicked cook. My favorite dish to make is my snow crab and pea risotto garnished with roasted walnuts. I incorporate science into cooking by experimenting with molecular gastronomy (I am sure you will love my liquid nitrogen chocolate ice cream recipe).

My romantic nature is also obvious in my acting. In fact, you should watch out for me in Mission Impossible Four as I actually bump into Tom Cruise! I can't guarantee that you won't hear me practicing lines or slipping into characters while we are roommates, but I can guarantee that you will love my Shaggy impersonation and my Indian accent.

I can't wait to get to know you in the near future.
Cheers,
Armaan Malhotra
Prettywings 1 / 74  
Dec 20, 2011   #2
I enjoyed reading your essay, and especially enjoyed your introduction. The only suggestion I would make is to compose an equally clever closing.
ahsan ali 2 / 6  
Dec 20, 2011   #3
haha your essay is really romantic, I hope your roommate also like your indian accent, anyway humorous essay! thumbs up :)
DesiGirl 9 / 52  
Dec 20, 2011   #4
Wow, your essay was great! I feel like you touched lightly upon the more interesting and subtle aspects of your life that the reader may not fully get by reading your resume. Definitely well written and infused with humor :)
Yardenah - / 2  
Dec 20, 2011   #5
I absolutely love this essay! If I was a boy, I would love to have you as a roommate. I didn't think homemade ice-cream could get any better, add some liquid nitrogen and it just did! I really like the reference to Tom Sawyer and the description of your favorite dish to cook. You did a very fine job of describing all of your talents without bragging about them. The only thing I might change is your use of contractions. From what I have learned, they tend to weaken essays. Good luck, hope you get in!
Adithya93 1 / 7  
Dec 20, 2011   #6
great essay! it addresses the question but maintains that not-too-serious tone. i love it and i think the beginning was hilarious! and i def learned about your personality its excellent and is polished
OP Armaan M 2 / 16  
Dec 20, 2011   #7
Thanks for the comments guys, I really appreciate them
hahahohohe 1 / 17  
Dec 21, 2011   #8
wow. i'm impressed.
great piece of essay!

perhaps you could add something like "I am smiling to myself now as I think of the memories we might make together at Stanford. Maybe we'll patch each other's hearts up after they've been stabbed by our ex-boyfriends. Maybe we'll study and quiz each other till 4am for a big test. Maybe we'll both be Kpop fans and learn Super Junior's latest dance moves together. Till the day I meet you, I can only wonder. "

suit ur essay better anyway.
OP Armaan M 2 / 16  
Dec 21, 2011   #9
Okay ill try to incorporate that into my essay. Btw does it come across like i am a guy or a girl? Cause i am a guy
OP Armaan M 2 / 16  
Dec 21, 2011   #10
Mikaela, I did not want it to read like that. But i agree it can be misinterpreted. My hope is to open with something unique and hopefully different from "Dear Roommate". How does "Dear dreamer," sound?
MichaelJ 1 / 7  
Dec 21, 2011   #11
Excellent essay. Very well written and very light-hearted! It'll score you brownie points with the admission officers ;). I kind of want to be your roommate now haha. Maybe if we both go to Stanford next year. Do you mind giving my commonapp essay a look?
mc52 4 / 14  
Dec 21, 2011   #12
I did not blink once whilst reading this humorous yet brilliant letter! You were able to describe yourself in an entertaining manner which catches the attention of the reader. You didn't come off as arrogant instead easy going and nice. Excellet work! If it's not too much trouble, can you please take a look at my essay?
Rajman333 2 / 15  
Dec 24, 2011   #13
Awesome response, especially because it seems to circle around your romanticism. I agree with Mike about the introductory sentence, but i thought it was witty. I think it all depends on who reads it, and how. Other than that, well written, and good luck!


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