Hello to all. I am from a Spanish speaking country and am applying to Stanford. Please review my letter to a future roommate. I will be thankful for any feedback. Don't worry if you are harsh.
"A Minimalist Geek"
Dear future Roomate,
I am minimalist, as you will see by looking at my desk. Computer, paper, pen; all understated and without unnecessary decorations. My bed further reveals my identity, white sheets without print whatsoever. No photos, not because I don't like my family and friends, but because I don't need photos to remind me of them. I love minimalism because it allows me to focus in what really matters at the moment and leaves everything superfluous aside. But don't worry, our room won't look as a picture in an architecture magazine, I am a bit messy myself and don't expect you to follow my minimalism. I am sure diversity is the spice of life and am pretty diverse myself. I was born in Mexico and have lived there most of my life, my family comes from Germany and I lived there for one year as I studied in a boarding school. I had a roommate and we had a great time together, we cooked pasta almost every night and stayed up until late talking about all possible topics, from current affairs to movies. I love cooking and am sure you will love my dry soup (Mexican dish) and my Currywurst (German dish). Since I am certain, you will also have a very interesting background, I foresee that we will have more than enough conversation topics, all while we eat delicious food.
The subjects I love the most are physics and mathematics, if you do too, then I am sure we can learn much from another and help each other find the best way to solve difficult problems. In case you don't I will be glad to help out and, maybe, one day, you'll like them too. Don't think I am all about studying; I love being with my friends, but having time alone is also very important to me. I balance the three in order to feel at peace.
I look forward to meet you and to the lasting friendship we are certainly going to develop.Just some revisions, its up to you to keep them or not. Otherwise, brilliant. You've successfully explained your personality through your description of your part of the dorm. You've successfully shown your diversity, something colleges take note of. You are not uptight, you have a fun and relaxed side to yourself. And you've shown that you can handle socializing and that you are a friendly person, and that you are someone a college would want. Good luck with your app!
Oh, and I wouldn't mind if you took a look at my essay as well ;D
One of the most genuine letters I've read, which is great; you have a very interesting background that really helps you to shine! LOCK THIS BABY IN!!
Above poster did a great job of editing, so I really don't have any other grammatical changes to make that would definitely enhance your essay.
