1st of all is this for the Common Application? If so you should note that the prompt reads : Please briefly elaborate on
one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below or on an attached sheet (150 words or fewer). Therefore you should focus on either the school magazine, rugby or the youth group. Don't write about all. I would personally prefer the youth group because it sounds less conceited. The other two kinda do. I get the feeling you are indicating that 'without me as captain the rugby team would suck' I think it is just an issue of not expounding on your ideas enough due to space constraints. Pick one. :)
Experiences and challenges(redundant) have broadened my vision of mankind and made me a proactive person. As the journalism and law club editor, I faced immence pressure. Students were demanding a magazine andwhile the administration slapwas adamant in its claim of lack of funds,mademaking our idea of success a mirage. In the end, perserverance made us winsuccessful in making the first succesful school magazine,a feat deserving of a spot in the halls of history.for the club .
In the field, rugby was my best sport. Not on nly did I learn a great deal of teamwork, but also playing asin the winger position earned me a crown scoring points and leading from the front as team captain.
After high school, I joined The Young Elite youth group. The programme(American English)based ondealt with drug use and abuse, e nvironmental cleaning, e thics and good health, m entoring and e ducation. It was the bestan avenue of profound personal growth in community development.
