A small but distinct example of multicultural students all gathered in less than an acre, is my second home, The Buckley School.
.... I like if you have a slight change in the organization of words;
A small, but distinct example of multicultural students all gathered in less than an acre, is the Buckley School, my second home.I entered this community at the age of 13 and felt not only accepted but also welcomed by my friends, teachers, and administrators.
I joined this community at the age of thirteen and enjoyed the warm welcome and acceptance by my peers, teachers and even administrators.Well, I feel you have not adequately responded to this;
tell us why it is important to you, and how it has shaped you
That is where the whole focus is and you've got to answer that!