Middle school was, for me, a rather awkward stage of my life, as I'm sure it was for many other people. Start off with a really strong sentence. As it is now, this first sentence wouldn't necessarily make me more excited to read your essay.
However, I'm fairly certain that my experiences during middle school were very different than those of most other suburban kids (This is not meant to be offensive, but 2 out of your 3 listed experiences are pretty typical for a middle schooler, (minus the child-star siblings)) (Make it very clear how your time in middle school was different) . It was the time when my younger brother and sisters' professional acting careers really started taking off, and w.W hile they were off shooting commercials
My life took a backseat (not sure this is the right use of the phrase) to the hectic filming schedules that consumed most of my family's life. Despite all this, I will forever remember my middle school years for one reason only (You'll remember it positively for one reason. You have a lot of reasons to remember your middle school times so maybe rephrase that sentence) : it was when I developed my passion for music.
Amidst the chaos of movies, marital problems, and school, my mother signed me up for the School of Rock in South Hackensack, perhaps just as a way to keep me occupied.
I remember walking in, seeing the tattered posters and the numerous holes in the walls, thinking, "(You might need to capitalize "This") this is it?"
But as I sat down behind the drum set for the first time, bashing away as the other students wailed on their guitars, basses, and keyboards, the appearance of the School of Rock became irrelevant. Everything else in my life became irrelevant. I had found my home. (Good ending for this paragraph!)
I practiced the drums for hours upon hours every day, eager to go to Thursday night rehearsal. It was where, oO nce a week, I could
You have a good essay! It definitely has the potential to stand out amongst the others, just end strong and start strong.
Also, not to be annoying, but that's so cool/interesting that you're Daisy and Charlie's brother! My good friend also has two younger actor siblings so I can imagine what middle school must have been like for you