Scripps Short Essay - 'all-girls college' gossip

How did you first learn about Scripps college, and why have you chosen to apply?

Quite honestly, the first time I've ever heard or learned about Scripps College was when my friends were gossiping about how unglamorous an all-girls college would be like. Well, even though boys are virtually the only thing on my mind 24/7, I still wanted to know about this curious women's college in California; and I am very glad that I decided to learn more. I have chosen to apply to Scripps primarily due to the fact that Scripps is simply an extraordinary school. Ranked as one of the top five best women's colleges in the U.S. and included in the renowned Claremont Colleges, I know Scripps will prepare me for any arduous challenge I might have to face in the future. I would also love to have a conversation with any of the spectacular professors in the International Relations Department at Scripps. Specifically, I would be thrilled to have a chance to discuss my views on specific Korean policies with Mr. Thomas Kim, the Associate Professor of Politics & International Relations.

i think your essay is good, but you may want to write a bit more about the course you want to do and why specifically scripps maybe..im kinda new at this but thats what i think...good luck!:)

Quite honestly, the first time I'd ever heard about Scripps College was when my friends were gossiping about how unglamorous an all-girls college would be.

Ranked as one of the top five women's colleges in the U.S. and included in the renowned Claremont Colleges, I know Scripps will prepare me for any arduous challenge I might have to face in the future.

Specifically, I would be thrilled to have a chance to discuss my views on specific Korean policies with Mr. Thomas Kim, the Associate Professor of Politics & International Relations.

This last sentence sounds like you might have just looked up a name and tossed it in there. Maybe elaborate just a little?

Good luck!

:)

"I have chosen to apply to Scripps primarily due to the fact that Scripps is simply an extraordinary school. Ranked as one of the top five best women's colleges in the U.S. and included in the renowned Claremont Colleges, I know Scripps will prepare me for any arduous challenge I might have to face in the future."

Are you implying that high ranking can "prepare you for any arduous challenge in future"? This is the feeling i get. you may not want to convey this to the admission officer.

to make your essay sound more genuine. instead of saying "I would also love to I would also love to have a conversation with any of the spectacular professors in the International Relations Department at Scripps"

you could insead rephrase as
" to be able to I would also love to have a conversation with any of the spectacular professors in the International Relations Department at Scripps would allow me to/ would give me the opprtunity to/would make me feel...."