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I secretly love Greek mythology ; Barnard Supp

jozzie121893 1 / 5  
Dec 26, 2012   #1
here is my first supplement. Feel free to give any necessary criticism or commentary.

I secretly love Greek mythology. Over the summer of my junior I was watching Clash of the Gods on the History Channel. I noticed Professor Kristina Milnor, passionately correlating the myth to reality. I researched Kristina Milnor. I was surprised by her achievements in academics and her career at Barnard College. To settle my curiosity I researched Barnard. I found out Barnard has values that do not just seek academic exploration, but personal growth. The vast subjects ranging from biophysics, music, to the classics gives me an opportunity to explore different worlds. As I am discovering these subjects, I can share my views with other passionate women. This is so important to me because I believe a college's close community enables ideas to thrive, and to turn into innovative actions. These actions can change the world, and make history. The value of determination, growth, and ambition gives me the motivation to rise up to the challenges that Barnard has to offer to me. Through these challenges I will help me to discover and grow intellectually and personally. Once I create myself, I will be strong enough to make a different in my own community.

katev 18 / 120 24  
Dec 27, 2012   #2
Good! You could try to come full circle and say something like "I will always be grateful that I flipped to the channel that day, for that was the day I discovered Barnard." Now this depends on the prompt. If the prompt is why/how Barnard, go with that. If the prompt is something else then your whole essay might need to change. I'm not sure what you're answering, I just found the writing errors!
Rosekareen 5 / 22 2  
Dec 27, 2012   #3
What question are you answering? That would help a lot.
For me it's a little bit confuse maybe you could say, aside from Kristina Milnor and Barnard, why you love greek mythology.

I love history and I love it because it teaches new things, you discover other worlds, you can learn from them and even if it has noting to do with modern life you can put somethings to practice and not make the same mistake, you learn from them.. etc.

It just an idea.
OP jozzie121893 1 / 5  
Dec 29, 2012   #4
the prompt is How did you first learn about Barnard College and what factors have influenced your decision to apply? Why do you think the College would be a good match for you?

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