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(looking and seeing / sing loud) intellectual vitality+ roommate - Stanford


amitbhasin 2 / 7  
Dec 16, 2010   #1
Stanford students are widely known to possess a sense of intellectual vitality. Tell us about an idea or an experience you have had that you find intellectually engaging.

The distinction between looking and seeing is a notion that I find particularly intriguing. Seeing refers to the human tendency to view objects with distance, depth, and especially meaning. In other words, people cannot see objects without perceiving them three-dimensionally and ascribing a particular function to them. I have always wanted to propose the option of perceiving the world in a completely different way: looking. What if people looked at tangible objects as mere meaningless blotches of color? Is it possible to visualize things without assigning them meaning? For instance, if someone were to look at a chair, would he be able to look at it as an arrangement of colors instead of a three-dimensional form? Would this same person have the capacity to discard any functional properties that he immediately associates with the chair? The answer to all these questions is no. Because people have been conditioned to conceive tangible objects as functional, they cannot abandon the deeply rooted perspectives they see objects with. I have tried to see objects as blotches of colors, but I found that it is practically impossible because I cannot forget that a table is meant for support, that a car is meant to drive, and that the sun is meant to shine.

Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better.

Dear roomate,
One thing you should know about me is that I like to sing. And when I sing, I sing loud. No, I don't have an award-winning voice and I was never a part of the school choir, but I still love to sing. So don't be terribly alarmed when you hear me butcher a high note from Whitney Houston's "I Will Always Love You" (Yes I do listen to Whitney Houston). So I want to apologize ahead of time for any damage I may (and very likely will) do to your ears. There are two ways you can react to my singing: hate it because my voice is complete and utter torture, or join me in the act of self expression, regardless of how embarrassing or foolish it may be. Hopefully you will choose the second alternative.

Once you get past my quirky singing habit, you will be delighted to find that I am actually a relatively normal person. I love to read for pleasure, go to the gym, watch youtube videos, and try different kinds of foods. Roomie, in me you will find a genuine companion that you can go out and have fun with, but at the same time have serious, intelligent conversations with. Together, we can stay up late and get into trouble, but get back to our books and study for mid-terms the next day.

So here we go. Finally, we're beginning the the most important chapter of our lives. I can't wait to experience the next four years. I know we will become the best of friends!

Best Wishes,
Amit Bhasin

Still working on the last one! Any advice on the first two?
zdmw911 9 / 32  
Dec 16, 2010   #2
I liked your first essay a lot; it took me a while to understand what you were going on about but I think it's an interesting concept.

The second essay is not as good, though it's still decent. It tells me that you're a lighthearted, charming person, but that doesn't set you apart. Try to pick on a more interesting quirk that you have.

BTW you spelled "roommate' wrong.

Good essays!
ishas 5 / 15  
Dec 17, 2010   #3
I honestly think you need to provide more valid examples of your attributes. You've mentioned your attributes which is excellent, but you need to provide some examples upon which these attributes can be demonstrated.

If possible, please edit my essays as well :)
OP amitbhasin 2 / 7  
Dec 18, 2010   #4
Thanks so much zdmw911! As for the second essay, I wanted to come off as funny & genuine. Do you think it's too much?

Thank you ishas! I'm assuming that you are referring to the second essay? But I'm not exactly sure what you mean? Can you maybe elaborate??
Chanman 3 / 10  
Dec 21, 2010   #5
I think that your first essay is fine, but your second essay needs more. The first paragraph of the second essay is very good, it shows a unique side of your personality; the second paragraph, not so much. What you need is to imbue that same personality of the first paragraph into the second paragraph. You mention things like reading, going to the gym, etc. as "normal" activities. Unfortunately, this makes everything sound generic. Try to keep the essay as personal as possible and maybe even elaborate on your singing if you want. Although I do like your last sentence about staying up late and studying - that's the kind of personality they want to see from you.

Good luck on your future endeavors and I hope this helped


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