topic: Spelman undergraduate admissions essay: Seeking knowledge and commitment to service are integral parts of the Spelman experience. Discuss and illustrate ways you have shown your commitment in these areas.
So my idea was to use art as a sort of bridge between commitment and knowledge, and I have an idea but i don't really know where to go with it. I read other people's essays for Spelman on here and feel as though my essay, or draft i should say is mediocre. help please ? :)
Hey Chelsee! So I think you should still post your draft and you can start from there. It's good you still have something. I like the idea of using art as a bridge. I know this sounds vague, but since I don't know specifics about you, just write what you are truly passionate and excited about and it will show through in your essay! I promise! So I'd say keep going with the art topic if that's really what you love. And put the draft up and we can tell you how to fix it. :)
It seems like the kind of idea that is hard to express. I have a suspicion that your essay tries to explain it TOO much for the reader and that what you need to do is try to express only the main idea of the concept of art as a bridge between them.
When you are trying to deal with several abstract concepts, the essay ends up being a mess. The thing to do is focus on a particular theme without feeling like you have to explain everything.
Most importantly, focus on these 2:
"Seeking knowledge" and "commitment to service"