It is creativity gone totally wrong.
Whoa, that is harsh, ha ha. I will read the essay and decide if I agree.
I'll add some commas:
My grandmother, then 75, amazed me with the precision and joy with which she went about her daily chores.
I love the first paragraph, and it is cool that the paragraph ends with some ACTION (sweeping.)
Though I believe that I should fit into a mesh, I strongly adhere to f
ollowing my own path within that mesh. ---excellent, this essay has a lot of wisdom.
I think you have a great writing style and a great way of thinking. You maintained a great theme throughout the essay, and you have a poetic way of writing. If you can give more details about your short term goals, it will be even better. The criticism from donrocks is important, because it shows how people MAY react to the essay, but overall I think this is a very valuable essay.
Frankly, the concept of you being linked to the the tree is well, i'll say useless because this is an admission essay and you should not forget that you are in competition with others.
FIRST PARA AND SECOND PARA: Not a word about you.
Every word is about YOU. This essay follows that writing rule, "show, don't tell."
I think if anyone reading this thread has the opportunity, they should read what Anthony Demello writes about a tree in his book called The Way to Love.
So... do not disregard that criticism, but rest assured that thoughtful readers will appreciate the wisdom in this essay, as I know Donrocks does even if he does not admit it ;-)