mystifier 2 / 4 Feb 19, 2010 #1Hi below is my University of Rochester admission essay question and answer and i would appreciate if someone can look it over for me.ThanksThe instructionIn 125 words or less, please answer the following questions.What makes the University of Rochester a good fit for you? In answering, identify your sources of information, including any conversations you've had with Rochester faculty, staff, students, or alumni.My essayI believe that university of Rochester is the best fit for me because of my own personality as a self motivated entrepreneur. I have read and studied many subjects on my own as an autodidact. These subjects range from business to personal development and Finance. I learned through information on the university's website and also from my friend Beth Kane, a University of Rochester graduate that Rochester has a good research oriented and an open curriculum policy. I then concluded that the university is the best place for me to learn and expand my knowledge of subjects that already ignite my curiosity; instead of just sticking to some other university's "custom-made one size fits all" curriculum.
dinhhoang0802 1 / 2 Feb 19, 2010 #2I think you should rewrite your first sentence. It's too cliché, and the hook is not there. As long as a university has a decent business program, it's a good fit for "a self motivated entrepreneur", right?
OP mystifier 2 / 4 Feb 19, 2010 #4HI dinhhoang0802how would u want me to change the first sentence. would u mind being more specific? how would u rewrite it if u were in my shoes?thanks