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'Service - characteristic that appeals to me the most' - FSU


breakingRenee 5 / 11  
Nov 20, 2011   #1
Prompt: FSU is more than just a world class academic institution preparing you for a future career. It embraces leadership, learning, service and global awareness which characteristic appeals to you.

The one characteristic that appeals the most to me is service. Community service has always been important to me as it gave my life purpose. Nothing is more important than giving back to your community, which is why I always try to involve myself in community service in any way I can. Doing community service has often helped me to step outside my comfort zone and take initiative. It has been a way of gaining both a greater understanding of humanity and a greater appreciation of the life I have.

The first time I heard about FSU was in an article about their work with habitat for humanity. After finding out more information about the school such as its reputation for academic excellence and its numerous volunteer projects I knew immediately that FSU was the perfect fit for me. Going to FSU will not only offer me the chance to receive an excellent education but also provide me with the skills and experience for a career in service. While attending FSU I plan to volunteer with habitat for humanity, Hands of Hope and H.E.L.P to name a few organizations. Working with these organizations will hopefully provide me with the skills to work with the International Volunteer Programme Association and pursue a career in psychology in the future.

Florida State University is a school that I believe will provide me with the opportunity to excel both academically and socially. Academically speaking they are known for their outstanding psychology department with world renowned professors. While socially they are known for having a well rounded student body that I hope to one day be a part of. Volunteering has and always will be an important part of my life and I know at Florida State University I will have the opportunity to work alongside people who share the same passion.

EF_Susan - / 2,365 12  
Nov 22, 2011   #2
Community service has always been important to me as it has given my life purpose.

The first time I heard about FSU was in an article about their work with H abitat for H umanity.---Capitalize this.

Academically speaking, they are known for their outstanding psychology department and world renowned professors.

WhileSocially they are known for having a well rounded student body that I hope to one day be a part of.

Have fun in school and good luck!

:)
mmay 1 / 11  
Nov 22, 2011   #3
It might be beneficial to avoid stating "The one characteristic that appeals the most to me is community service." Avoiding being verbs like "been" might also strengthen your essay. The best of luck to you as you apply to FSU. I hope you will continue to pursue your passion for community service.

Hope this helps,

Madison


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