Beep, beep, beep! After only a measly four hours of sleep, it's time to prepare for another strenuous day. I found myself juggling three jobs after high school to make ends meet, and also help my parents. With my nose to the grindstone, I was hardly satisfied. I opted for college, but did not have the time or money. I felt like my intelligence was going a waste. One day, I talked to an Air Force recruiter and from there on out, I knew I wanted to be an Airman in the U.S. Air Force. I admired the thought to serve my country, leave the nest, and to explore the world to take on new challenges in life. I answered the call to serve! The military has opened many windows of opportunity. None, more important than helping me earn a college degree! I will transfer all my hard work from my military endeavors into my academic endeavors and I will succeed.
My military endeavors have taken me to some extraordinary places, but New England will always be a place I call home. Being close to family and childhood friends, I can't think of a better place to earn my degree. Northwest Florida State College is a fine institution that accommodated all of my military obligations, but I will be moving back to New England after I separate from the Air Force. Distance learning is out of the question for me. I prefer the face to face feel of a traditional classroom setting. A transition to Merrimack College will lead to not only a brighter career, but also to provide preparation to face life's obstacles along the way.
A core value we live by in the Air Force is "service before self." We hold the service's needs above our own. This is a value I plan to translate into my every day study habits. I will do anything and everything in my power to achieve academic excellence. I have been involved with various volunteering opportunities while in the service. This is something I aim to continue, along with participating in many extracurricular activities. It feels self fulfilling to give back to a community that has supported me over the years.
With the economy as awful as it has been, it's getting difficult to find a good job. Employers are seeking unique well educated professionals. The military has taught me many intangibles that are deemed valuable in the civilian work force. A college degree in conjunction with these values will be evident to the employers that I am the distinctive candidate they're seeking. Furthermore, I plan on participating in ROTC to possibly assume a military future as a commissioned officer.
I am always aspiring to be better than I was yesterday. Completing my college degree is next up in line. My eagerness to learn is truly unparalleled. With the thought of continuing my college education, I wake up with an enormous grin of excitement each and every morning. The road ahead will surely be a difficult one, but I am confident that an education combined with my military experiences will make me a thorough individual able to tackle any challenge. Having been a New England resident for 20 years, I am very familiar with Merrimack's excellent reputation, and I would be honored to be a part of your institution. As a potential student I hope that you will see my drive, dedication, and eagerness to succeed. Thank you for your consideration.
-James Hardy
and to also help my parents
and to explore the world and take on new challenges in life
None, more important than helping me earn a college degree! I will transfer all my hard work from my military endeavors into my academic endeavors and I will succeed.
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it's getting difficult to find a good job
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GREAT ESSAY!
good luck!
One day, I talked to an Air Force recruiter, and from there on out I knew I wanted to be an Airman in the U.S. Air Force.--- I moed a comma over a little.
admired The thought of serving my country inspired me; I would leave the nest and to explore the world to take on new challenges in life.
None The military has opened many windows of opportunity -- the most important among these being the opportunity to earn a college degree! I will transfer all my hard work from my military endeavors into my academic endeavors, and I will succeed.---- excellent! Your enthusiasm will inspire the reader, I think.
The road ahead will surely be a difficult one, but I am confident that an education combined with my military experiences will make me a thorough well-rounded individual able to tackle any challenge.
You will definitely be well-received. You have a way of writing that reflects real sincerity... I'm not sure how to explain what I mean, but... it is pretty impressive.
