I am applying to Carleton College early decision, where the deadline is November 15. On their supplement they only ask for one 300 character response to the question "Why are you interested in Carleton College and how did this interest develop?" My current response is below;
At the culmination of my tour, while I shivered beneath my dew laden coat, my desire to go to Carleton was affirmed when the guides stated they wake up early on cold Saturday mornings, to give tours by choice, for no pay, only to share their wonderful experiences at Carleton with future students.
I feel as though this does not properly answer the question and that instead I should state a simpler and more realistic answer. I have been struggling to say something since I found 300 characters does not allow for much creativity.
Any help would be great, thanks!