I'm really stuck so please if anyone have any input it will really help me thanks!
UBC personal profile "What is important to you?"
As they say "food is the ingredient that binds us together"; it teaches me in a variety of ways and serves as a medium through which I can engage with others. Food has also served as a piece of canvas on which I've been able to create and experiment out an array of innovative recipes in order to expand my flavor palette. Sharing my passion for food with others has always been one of my favorite aspects of it; it makes bonding and communicating with others a lot simpler.
Aside from food, my family is the most important element of my life. Growing up, I had always been taught the significance of family, and even if I disagree with them at times, I've always sought their company, whether for a simple dinner or a field trip to the beach. My family has molded me into the person I am today; they have given me a great deal of flexibility and independence, which has taught me numerous life lessons about making decisions. Their love encourages me to break boundaries and to be my own authentic self, their trust and support give me the confidence to do and explore more in my daily life.
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Theh keyword here is "What is", singular. Your response is reflective of "What are", plural. You can't divide the attention of the reviewer by presenting 2 different important aspects. There is a divide that cannot be overcome when you do that. It creates 2 seperate identities for you instead of one strong image based on your ability to explain something of importance to you.
The family discussion as an important aspect has been done to death. It is practically the go to response for every student who cannot thing outside of the box. Food was interesting as an important aspect. It highlighted your various personalities that directly relate to your enjoyment of food. That is something important that the reviewer could take note of. I believe that your essay should therefore, focus on a fully developed importance of food discussion. It is a bit out of the box in thinking and presentation. It should be discussed as important and not as a favorite activity. Remember that.
I love the food part. However, considering that this is part of a larger application that I am sure you have an over arching narrative for, I would advise you to really go over how you can connect this answer back to that over arching narrative, if any. Best of luck!