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Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about his quality or accomplishment makes you proud, and how does it relate to the person you are?
One experience I am truly proud of is being a part of the SHCP Women's Tennis team. Throughout my 3 years of participation, I feel as though I have not only watched my tennis skills develop, but have watched my own self grow and mature. The tennis journey has been one of great significance to my high school career, changing the way I am as a person for the better.
During the first year of tennis my sophomore year of high school, it was extremely difficult controlling my emotions on the court during a match. Instead of using anger as a boost to try even harder, I let it control me. I had a lack of faith in my game, underestimating myself and what I was capable of. When I was losing in a match I put myself down and told myself that there was no chance of victory. When the end of the season came, I looked back at not only the poor winning record I had but also at how harmful my attitude was towards myself. Realizing this, I knew I needed to make a change.
During the summers before junior and senior year, I tried to play as much tennis as I could to improve my personal game in order to feel better about myself. I became extremely dedicated to the sport, promising myself that next season would be a great improvement to the last. When fall tryouts came around, I had a renewed sense of attitude and confidence. Not only did I feel a lot better about the skills I improved on, but I felt that I could finally play without putting constant strain on myself. This boosted my self-assurance greatly and I found myself having more faith in all the things I could do. I knew what I was capable of and knew that as long as I believed in what I could accomplish, everything meant to be would fall in its place; and it surely did just that. Tennis during my senior year proved to be one of the hardest seasons, yet I did not fall to pieces when pressure was at its greatest. I worked through the stress and doubt and ended up not only receiving MVP on my tennis team but honorable mention in the entire West Catholic Athletic League. These awards were only the toppings to my already spectacular season.
My tennis experience at SHCP greatly symbolizes my four years spent in high school. In the beginning, I was a person with a great lack of faith in myself but I have grown to accept my mistakes and instead use them to further improve myself. I have changed so much as a person dealing with struggles with school, problems at home, and internal conflicts with myself. Like in tennis, I evaluated my problems with school and changed myself to fix them.
My progress in school and tennis are only parts of who I am as a person. In life, I believe that we are never satisfied with what we already have, which is a good thing. It is good to always want more and more so that we are constantly striving to be the best we can be. Perfection is something that we constantly work towards but will never achieve. There's always room for improvement. I will never be as good as I want to be in tennis or in school, but through hard work, persistence, and dedication, I can make every effort to be the best I can be. In the end, as long as I know that I have given my all towards every situation, then that's all I can truly ask for.
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Fix up the ending or risk copying somebody word for word; that risk is extremely high when you're expressing perennial platitudes with no originality; I may have even written something a few words off in passing a time before, when I was not feeling up for it, to give you an idea.
One experience I am truly proud of is being a part of the SHCP Women's Tennis team.
you dont need that sentence you can start with:
Throughout my 3 years of participation on the SHCP Women's Tennis team...
**remember to show not tell. instead of simply saying that this was one experience that you are truly proud of, show them. Create a vivid picture.
