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'similar ideologies as my own' - Babson supplement- Dear Roommate


TheBostonian92 2 / 7  
Jan 1, 2010   #1
Write a letter to your first-year roommate at Babson. Tell him or her what it will be like to live with you, why you chose Babson, and what you are looking forward to the most in college:

Dear Roommate:

While I jogged from my house to the Charles River and listened to my "Run Liyang Run" play list, my mind wandered off as usual. I thought about Babson, you, who I am and who I want to be.

Right now, I am listening to Kings of Convenience (they are my favorite band this month, what's your favorite band of the month?). There are some unfolded clothes lying around. My wet sneakers are blocking the door. A half eaten home-made burrito is sitting next to me. And that's the condition of my room most of the time. I am not the neatest person, but I do clean my room once a week. I like to run while it's drizzling. Also I love to make food, that means you will never be hungry!

Those around me often say that I am a spontaneous adventurer. I suppose I am, I did go to IHOP with a friend at 3AM one time and I did have a sleep-over on a roof. We will definitely go on tons of fun adventures at Babson. Whether it's gaze at Boston from a roof to clear our minds or start a small business to earn some extra cash. I am up for it whenever you are.

I am sure both of us choose Babson because we want a great business education, to be a part of the unique FME class and to have awesome retired-business-wizards as professors. In addition for me, a Tree Hugger, Babson became my dream college when I visited and saw the wind turbine standing proudly as a sign of power and optimism. I could see myself living in the Green Tower and organizing events for Earth Day.

As I learned more about Babson, my desire grew stronger. Over the summer of 2009, I earned the opportunity of working as a marketing intern for a newly established company, Crelligence Media, founded by Babson students. When I found myself having fun and working efficiently at midnight with the team while eating cheese pizza, I wanted to become part of the Babson community. I wanted to submerged myself in the harmonious working environment I been searching for. How did you discover that you wanted to be a Babson student?

With the start of college year approaching rapidly, I can't wait to meet new people and learn new things. I am also excited for the way my new experiences will help me to grow as a creative learner, as a good friend, and as an individual. I can not wait to immerse myself in an environment with people who have similar ideologies as my own. More importantly, together, you and I will learn how to tackle real life problems creatively through integrative thinking. We will leave our footprints at Babson like Jeff Avallon did with Ideapaint at the E-tower; it's a funny story, if you don't know about it. I'll tell you when we meet!

Sincerely,

Liyang Wang

Do you think I answered the prompt fully? Did I rumble on for too long?
Thanks!
ms_jahangiri 2 / 1  
Jan 1, 2010   #2
What are you looking forward to the MOST at Babson?
I didn't catch that part of the prompt in your answer.
OP TheBostonian92 2 / 7  
Jan 1, 2010   #3
Hmm, I was hoping that I would show what I look forward through what I look for in a college/Babson..but I guess that didn't work well.

Any suggestions on how I can slip that in smoothly?
OP TheBostonian92 2 / 7  
Jan 2, 2010   #4
Babson supplement- Letter to your Roommate

Revised, again. I added alot of new stuff. So please leave any suggestions!

Is it too long?
Did I answer the prompt fully?
Any suggestion is welcome!

Thanks!
bellcicle - / 2  
Jan 2, 2010   #5
There's nowhere you can really go wrong with this prompt, so I just took a look at diction and syntax! Hope my suggestions are helpful!

Thanks for helping me out too!
OP TheBostonian92 2 / 7  
Jan 2, 2010   #6
Thank you, bellcicle! That helped alot!

Do you guys think I said enough about what I look forward to in college?
Also, is it too long?
OP TheBostonian92 2 / 7  
Jan 4, 2010   #7
Hi, guys! So last night at 1AM, I decided to restart my Babson letter. I had some of my friends read the two versions and most of them said they like the newer version better...what do you guys think? I'll return the favor! :)
collegechic - / 8  
Jan 12, 2010   #8
the second is definitely better!


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