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A simple engineering admission essay . AUC: What would you benefit from studying in our university.


Amahrous 1 / -  
Apr 14, 2015   #1
Why I want to join (university)

Since my childhood, I have been passionate about machines as well as structures. Because of this, I developed an interest of understanding the sophistication behind all this. Time and time again I found myself disassembling whatever I could lay my hands on just to satisfy my curiosity. With time, out of many questions here and there, I came to understand that the idea behind all of this falls under engineering. So I decided to become an engineer. To live my dream, I am looking forward to joining(institution) where I believe my dream will be realized.

After various enquiries here and there, I made a decision that (name of institution) is the best place for me to achieve my dreams. I have also looked at the academic requirements that the university lists for a student to be admitted in an engineering course, and given my performance, I anticipate an A-level result, which will be out by May this year will guarantee the necessary points required to join this institution.

Apart from school education, I have been engaging myself with engineering work. One such participation was working as an intern with Al Jaber Engineering Co-op for a period of two weeks as a trainee site engineer. Additionally, I have participated in more than one engineering seminar which has increased my desire and admiration to pursue engineering as a profession.

My main goal in life is to open my own construction company, and I am therefore not only looking forward for an undergraduate degree in civil engineering but also a masters as well as a PhD in the same discipline. This is necessary if I am going to realize my dream of becoming an established engineer.

In conclusion, I believe that (the name of institution) is the best place for me if I am to live my dream. This is one of the major reasons as to why I want to join this institution, for it is only through good education in reputable university that can ultimately enable me to be what I want to be in future.
lcturn87 - / 435 236  
Apr 14, 2015   #2
There is a misspelling of enquiries. It is spelled inquiries. Also, delete here and there. What do you anticipate to be an A-level result? Is it your grades? Please describe in more detail. I would describe a passion for pursuing a profession as a desire. I suggest either deleting admiration or discussing how you admire engineering professionals. I could understand how one could have a desire to pursue a profession along with admiration for professionals in that field.

I would discuss how you want to obtain a degree in civil engineering and later pursue a Masters and Ph.D. in the same field of study. Do you want to be an established engineer or an accomplished engineer?

You use the word one and then reasons. I believe you are discussing only one major reason and that is living your dream. You can change the sentence by stating that it is a major reason why you want to attend. I want you to change the last sentence. When you discuss getting a good education at a reputable school this should be a new sentence. Do you want to go to a reputable school to achieve your future goals? Do you feel this will give you a good start? Think about this before writing your last sentence.


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