"Sing with your heart, not with your mouth." - Gettysburg Supplement.

"Sing with your heart, not with your mouth."

Threes ago, I was appointed with the position Worship Leader, and been given the opportunity to lead music for the kids and youth at a community church. At start, I thought having this title was nothing to care about, and it didn't come with any responsibilities. Week by week, I would come in, sing songs for the kids, and that would be the end. I didn't put my heart into my work, and my brother took notice of that. My brother confronted me and told me that I'm not doing my job properly. Feeling offended, I took a stand for myself, and told him that my job is to sing and nothing more. In an instance, my brother said that to be a Worship Leader, you must have a passion for singing, and have a strong desire to touch the hearts of others. After this argument, I decided to take a hiatus, and had a time of reflection. After a couple months of reflection, I returned to the church, and began leading worship again. This time, I wholeheartedly sang for one purpose, to touch the hearts of others.

As time progress, I sang songs, interacted with kids, and communicated with my fellow youths. I became more involved, and had a more positive character. Even though, I've become more active and positive leader, I've never heard anyone being touched by my singing. As a result, I started to doubted my ability. My church leader confronted me, and told me that I have touched many hearts, and have been strong impact to the lives of kids and youths who lived in the community. As I ask around, I realized that the kids loved my way of worship, and enjoyed that I sang with all my heart. I discovered that because of the music I've been performing, kids enjoyed coming to church, and wanted to invite others kids, so they can experience this enjoyment. I never noticed the effect I had on the youth. I learned that because of my love for music and my positive character, I've become their role model, and they decided to throw away their negative character.

Singing, is more than an act of the voice projecting a melody, its music making a difference. Leading worship every week, I never thought it would impact the lives of others. My voice brought happiness and joy, and changed the lives of members of the church. To witness kids and youth from the community becoming more positive, and desiring to change, brings me great delight and pleasure. Now, I am motivated to continue the great job I have, and do it with all my heart.

Even though I've become more active and positive leader, I've never heard anyone being touched by my singing.

No comma after Even though

Is this supposed to say three years ago?

...I was appointed to the position Worship Leader and given the opportunity to lead music for the kids and youth at a community church. At the start, I thought having this title was nothing to care about, and that it didn't come with any responsibilities.

Use a colon to show "more is to come":
This time, I wholeheartedly sang for one purpose: to touch the hearts of others. ---- great sentence!!!

use a semi-colon to put 2 sentences together:
Singing, is more than an act of the voice projecting a melody; its music making a difference.

:-)

<instead of adding thats into this sentence, is there a way you can change around the first part? or even combine the two? When I began, I did not realize that certain responsibilities came with this new title* sounds a tad more positive.


Interesting. you use a tense that seems rather unfitting in an essay, but as a reminiscent aspect of it, using would and took.. make it more story-like.

However, some things


make the tense a bit more difficult to follow. try to make everything consistent in tense or it gets distracting.


what do you mean by the "in an instance"?


good for you~ here, there is a slight parallel error because you use "returned to the church" but you also use "began leading" - began to lead*


confronted sounds somewhat negative, but if it does fit. maybe you can combine that part to say: Surprisingly, my church leader...* to lead for a better transition and add some positive-ness into it :P

Good luck~

Singing can do wonders. I know a lot of the music I listen to I love because of their voice or the message that they are sending.