hey, I have some reading for you, guys!:D
It's my common app essay, topic of my choice. Please tell what do you think!
Memento-Every Single Moment Is a Completely New Wonder
I have my past behind me to never forget where and who I was; and I look hopeful towards the future to always remember where I want to go and who I want to become. I have an infinite number of paths to follow and means to use to make this change. I have the capacity to reason and decide which of them I must, I should or I need to use. And I have this moment that allows me to connect and harmonize, to transform darkness in light, to convert dreams to reality, to search and find bridges between recent past and near future, between reality and imagination.
I associate life with a blank sheet on which I will draw lines so as to obtain harmony. No matter what point I am in, no matter when, I am free to go ahead, to turn right or left or to go back either to do better what I have done or to reconsider my way; I am free to bring new colors, new meanings and new perspectives, I am free to turn to the old ones, too. However, there is something completely prohibited: regardless of the reason, I must never stop, because not trying to find the right way is certainly a defeat, while guessing will at least eliminate the wrong options, which is always of great help. This is why I believe in the power of this moment, in the multiple possibilities bounded to it, in the chance it offers me to learn, to understand, to create, to evolve.
When thinking about all these, the desire to cover my page with bright tints, to make it as beautiful as possible and to try my best to make a difference no matter how small, comes naturally. I am aware of the obstacles I may find in my way, but I know there is no force stronger than the force of will; I know I might fail, but I also know that failure is not useless, that it has the power to open portals to discovery and to reinforce my ambition and my desire to pass trough them. So, failure is not the worst thing in the world; the very worst thing is not to try at all. For this reason, I wish I always had the courage to give it a try. And it is now, right this moment, when I have the chance to begin drawing enthusiastically a new wonderful line.
But even the greatest enthusiasm is not enough to delineate a harmonious long-lasting shape. Since I want to obtain ideal shades on my page, I must find a special instrument that will enhance my work; I must use a special brush. For this role I consider knowledge is the most appropriate. Everything I learn makes me stronger and everything I do not know makes me want to learn more. I need strength to gain the ability to design hope and fate in my dream. Also, knowledge is the key that opens even the most distant and least accessible doors that restrain access to warm joyful moments; it is through remarkable knowledge that I think I can shape my path more easily and with fewer corrections.
To build this knowledge I must live every moment for a reason and with a clear aim. There are no parts more important than others; every one of them can become the right time when I decide it. It is enough to want to make this effort. If I manage to do this, I am sure I am on the right way that allows me to proudly say: "This is what I choose, this is my dream, this is my line."
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Thanks! :D
Hi!
I like your language; it's abstract mostly but beautiful.
But the essay lack specificity. the main purpose of this essay is to let the AO understands who you are. I know you ARE talking about who you are, but the way to show your personality should better be actions and activities, which is more persuasive.
I guess telling story is the best. Many people think the best essay is one that reflects deep thesis through an interesting story.
So.. hope it helps !
