My sister has ADHD, she was not treated at a young age - STANFORD; S.E. Who am I?

Stanford students possess an intellectual vitality. Reflect on an idea or experience that has been important to your intellectual development. (100 to 250 words)

My sister has ADHD (Attention deficit hyperactivity disorder), she was not treated at a young age; I used to believe my aversion for her will never fade because of who she was. At that time, I didn't know what ADHD was. I didn't understand the effects of it when it isn't treated. I always thought that it was her choice to act that way and not due to the disorder.

It was exasperating to listen to her, as she keeps repeating the same mistake. When I was fourteen I saw her cry and lament about her life, I realized how affected she was when she has arguments with any of our relatives because of her actions. She really does try to become a better individual. I learned to listen and suppress my judgement; I began to be vicarious of her inner battle as she tries to change but wanes back to who she was.

I realized that will power alone will not suffice; acceptance, awareness, and will power are needed to overcome our past selves.
In order for her to change for the better, she needed to have her own realizations. At times, I act the way she's acting to show her, her flaws. This has been the best approach so far, as she becomes more aware of what she's doing.

Change cannot happen if we don't help one another become better individuals. We can't live in a better world if we continue to deplore our own flaws, without resolution.

Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better. (100 to 250 words)

I realized how affected she was -> be more specific.
The experience has the potential to be a very good, reflective piece where you demonstrate high thinking ability. Hone in on a certain incident maybe? And how you reacted to that instead of simply mentioning her behavior as a three y/old. What did you learn - speak more about this.

Second question.
unorthodox study habit - elaborate more on this would you. It's unnecessary to say something like, "Have a great day" - admissions officers will be reading this not your roommate. "I can't wait to know and meet you in person. " - unnecessary as well.

Third question
"A session in Filipino Chinese Catholic Youth, when the kids are more rowdy than usual and the members are not cooperative, it's emotionally and physically draining to let them interact and do the assigned task of tutoring and crafting."

Re-word this and split into shorter sentences so it becomes easy for admissions to read it.

I realize I might have been a little harsh but its for your benefit.

All the best,

thanks for your advised here's a revision :)

i hope you may read it and give me further suggestions to improve on it :D

MOD comment:One essay at one time please!

help please!

Im not saying omit the definition, but Im not sure whether you'd need to put this? they are educated admissions officers, and it is a widely known disorder - this would only benefit in giving you more words to play with in your actual answer..


maybe * stand by, as she kept repeating the same mistake.

Theres some corrections with just the first answer, I think you need to really revise these answers for grammatical errors, but the flow more importantly, try to think outside the box, try to start sentences with words other than I, try to break up the monotonous tone as we'll ! its a really interesting idea but its just not conveyed well yet ! keep going, you've done brilliant corrections already !! and I am sorry if these come across harsh they aren't at all !!

Good luck with applications too :)