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"Sky Poo" PERSONAL STATEMENT My dream to assist people in finding happiness.


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Oct 22, 2015   #1
This is my personal statement. Please give me as much suggestions as possible and also check my grammar. Thank you!

"Sky Poo" was what my friends and classmates used to call me when I was in elementary. Why "sky poo?" Because my name is Angel. In Chinese, it is "Tian Shi," but it also sounds like the Chinese word for"Sky Poo." In addition to that, I have a big mole on my face that looks like a poo. Starting from third grade, my classmates made up a song about how I am a Poo that fell from the sky and the mark is on my face, the mole. It was really funny and creative, but I didn't think it was funny because their words had hurt me deeply.

I was lucky to get rid of the mole at the age of eleven, so I didn't get any serious trauma; however, in those ten years, I lived under derision that led to the lack of confidence in my character. I was ashamed of my physical appearance that I would often keep my head down when I was walking. I also had hard times looking at people's eyes when we were talking because I was afraid that I was too ugly for them to look at. Living under the sense of inferiority, I started to hide myself under the crowd, which led to a great part of my personality, quiet and shy.

Even though I got rid of the mole, there was a while when I still felt uncomfortable about my physical appearance. After so many years, with the encouragement from my family and friends, I have successfully walked out of the shadow. Nobody thought that this joke could hurt me so much, but it did. From this experience, I realized how an event that may seem to be trivial can actually affect a person's entire life. That is why when you go visit a psychologist, he or she will often ask about your background and past events because these two factors are what made you the way you are today.

The experience I encountered was not that serious, but it already has a great impact on who I am today. Imagine those people who are experiencing or had experienced more serious events in their lifetimes that led to their pessimistic view toward life. My goal in life is to help people at all ages with their hardships and guide them toward happiness. Especially nowadays, the society is getting more complicated and competitive, people are pressuring each other too much. People tend to live under stress and forget how to enjoy life. I want people to find the true and eternal happiness deep inside them, and not trying to bury it. To achieve my goal, I want to understand how exactly behavior and character of a person is developed by studying psychology, and through that, I will assist people in crossing the barrier between themselves and happiness.

I choose to go to Chinese University of Hong Kong not only because it provides psychology as a major, but also because it provides a flexible environment for the students to select courses and electives in any way the students prefer. The school also encourages students to achieve double majors and double degrees, which allows me to study psychology and education at the same time to learn more on how to exert my knowledge of psychology while teaching children. Another reason I choose to go to CUHK is its location. CUHK is located in Hong Kong, where it is developing into a culturally integrated community. This kind of environment suits me because I have been living in an international environment for the past twelve years; however, with all the opportunities and programs CUHK provides, it enables me to exert my knowledge of psychology into the society, as well as nurturing me to become a better global citizen.
bonboncase 20 / 45 15  
Oct 22, 2015   #2
Hi Angel
Since you are applying for Hong Kong's university I believe your story at the beginning will certainly make people laugh. I did ( I am also Chinese). It's such a sad story but explain well why you want to be a psychologist.

For grammar check

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