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"Smiling as a successful Reedie... Why Reed?" supplement essay


kathy_altania 1 / 1  
Jan 14, 2011   #1
Hi everyone, this is my essay for Reed College. The topic is "Why Reed?". I already submitted this, but I still want to receive your comment about my essay.

I wanna be in Reed College, so bad
Above all of the dreams I ever had
I wanna be on the cover of Reed Magazine
Smiling as a successful Reedie...


If it could think, what did "the apple" have in mind when it fell on Isaac Newton's head? "Maybe this man would appreciate me more than something to eat, maybe he'll make me worth more than just tarts and juice". From that point of view, "the apple" did not fall by chance but after a long process of selection, and Newton was the chosen one.

In my case, Reed College is my Isaac Newton. Along with the gravity, it has captivated my heart and gradually pulled me out of my tree. Having long known about Reed's reputation, I believe it will provide me with the best academic environment and opportunities for my intellectual ambitions. About this, the high percentage of Reed's graduates who go on to earn Ph.D.s has a major influence to my decision, since my ultimate academic goal is to get a Ph.D. degree. I am especially interested in Humanities 110 and the requirement of a senior thesis at Reed, because learning about culture and doing research are actually my favorite academic activities. Having conducted two individual research papers after my high school graduation, the idea of a senior thesis really inspired me much. Another thing that makes Reed more outstanding is the fact that although it does not participate in the US News ranking, it still stands firmly in the first tier of best liberal art colleges. After all, rankings and scores are not everything to Reed, and this is where students are not only appreciated by their scores and marks but also their passion to learning.

Moreover, what I love about Reed are also its beautiful campus, interesting traditions and diverse activities. Like one prospie of Reed wrote on her blog after a visit, the college is "way better than Disneyland, the most magical place on Earth". The Tudor Gothic architecture, Canyon, amphitheater and unique theme dorms make the campus so attractive, while Paideia festival, Arts Week and the Renn Fair are the school's trademarks which I always want to experience as a Reedie. I often imagine myself running around the campus to catch up with cheerleading team, a capella group and cooking club, staying late in my dorm room writing articles for Reed Magazine and the Quest newspaper, spending my weekends with Brick the Lego Society, Reed Outing Club, and even exploring the truth of the college's famous legends. I want to give everything a try; I want to mark my everyday in Reed with unforgettable experiences. For all those reasons, Reed will definitely give me the opportunities to discover myself, follow my dreams and learn how to contribute my best to the community, to Reed, to my country and to the world.

It had to be Isaac Newton who was struck on the head by an apple and then discovered the Law of Gravitation. It has to be Reed College where I'll enjoy the happiest days of my youth and construct the best foundation for my future. I have always believed in the destiny between Reed and me. How about you?

(Many thanks and an apology to the songwriter of the song "Billionaire" for changing the lyric)

That's my essay. Thank you for reading and thank you more for commenting!
ukkuma 3 / 40  
Jan 14, 2011   #2
Hi! Nice how you connected Isaac Newton and Reed; the opening paragraph is interesting and refreshing.
Although you have some minor grammatical errors, overall I think this is a good solid essay. You gave specific examples of why it has to be "Reed", and the goals you want to achieve there. Just a few notes, though..does your essay include the words in italics? (I'm hoping not) Also, I'm not sure about the last sentence. It'd be awkward to question the admissions officer.

To sum it up though, I still think you did a pretty good job. Good luck!
OP kathy_altania 1 / 1  
Jan 14, 2011   #3
Thank you Yuko!

The italic words are rewritten from the lyric of a song named "Billionaire" of Bruno Mars (a very famous song recently). That's why I included the last sentence in bracket, because the italic words at the beginning connected with the last sentence.

It seems like that italic part of the essay create some confusion :-?
aistar 1 / 1  
Jan 14, 2011   #4
Nice essay! using the song's lyrics is a good idea but you dont want to sound desperate. its a really neat idea but i'm on the fence for it. the rest of your essay works really well with the newton and apple idea that you started out with!


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