A. Academic Elements (required)
Academic History
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Passion for language via music
I had a huge passion in Korean language because of K-pop music when I was still a 14-year-old girl. I started learning Korean at that age, and I was a fast-learner in the class. I remember all the Korean character in a month, and I could use it very unhindered. It surprised my Korean teacher; so, after that, I keep learning Korean until now. After I study abroad to the US, I had to learn Korean by myself; however, since the college that I was studying at does not provide Korean language course, I got a chance to go to University of Washington to take Korean courses for two quarters. After taking the placement test, I was placed in Korean203. I developed more knowledge in the class, and corrected some language mistake that I used to make. Moreover, I decided to take Korean 301 in the following quarter because it was the best Korean class that I have ever taken. Since this class was challenging to me, I got to study more than what I used to be. As expected, in both of my Korean courses, I got A+, as a perfect average of what I wanted. Even though I had to commute to UW to take Korean course after my classes in Seattle Central College; but it was worth it. Those satisfied results were not just come from nowhere; I did a lot of works on it. Why? Because I love Korean. During every summer break, I will go to Korea a month. Not only traveling, but taking classes at Konkuk University to enhance my Korean skills. In my experiences, I got into the highest level in the program every-time. When I just went Korea for traveling with my friends, I would always be the tourist guide and the translator. Those opportunities are helping me to get more chances to practice my Korean skills, and I have been doing a perfect job on it.
The reason why I want to transfer to University of Washington is because, I have a huge passion about learning Korean, and I have strong confidence that I will do perfect job in this major. Furthermore, Communication is an interesting major to study; but, during the time I am studying in UC Davis, I am still having a big vision of being a translator one-day, not a public relation person.
After I graduate from university, I hope I could work in a place that needs perfect language skills. Like travel agency, or a translation agency. My father was a tourist guide in Japan for about 10 years because he was a Japanese major person. He told me that he enjoyed that time, because being a tourist guide can travel all around, but they are still earning money. He always tells us about how much he loves that job, and how much hard-work he put in it; I was affected by my father. I told myself that one-day, I will be a person who enjoys the job and do all my best in it; just like my father did.
I have a personality is that once I decide to achieve a gold, I will do all my best to get the best result. Since I got a huge interest in Korean, I tried lots of different ways to learn Korean when I did not get the chance to have a Korean in-class lecture. For instant, I talked to my Korean roommate only in Korean every-day, I watched a lot of Korean drama but without looking at the subtitle; and because I love listening to Korean music, I tried translating the lyrics to Chinese, and then searched online to find out the errors that I made. Although I used my own method to learn Korean, but because of those hard-works I have done, my Korean skills are way better than others. Thus, I have 100 percent of confidence that I am all prepared for Korean major.
When I was still living in Seattle, UW was the dream school that I always want to study at. I hope to gain more knowledge and information about how Korean language was made, and more history background. From the experiences that I had before, I believe the University of Washington would let me develop more useful knowledge for future career. I wish I could be part of the campus that welcomes students from all ethnic backgrounds.Holt Educational Consultant - / 14,801 
4780 Lin, the prompt is asking you to discuss your college path. Therefore, including a presentation about how you got interested in Korean at the age of 14 is irrelevant to the essay. Your focus must be on the development of your interest in this major in reference to your original major. I say original major because it seems that you were not enrolled in Linguistics (?) in your previous university. So, if you had a different major, you should explain why you were enrolled in that major, why you opted to originally enroll in that university, and then add the development of your interest in Korean and how that led you to take classes at UW. This revision, if applicable, should help to shorten the content of your essay. Make sure that you mention what your original major at UC Davis was just to make sure that the reviewer will be able to follow the discussion in an informed manner. By the way, please be clear about whether or not you will be able to attend UW in the upcoming semester. You did not respond to that question either. Also, aside from offering cutting edge Korean language classes, what other reasons do you have which can be considered compelling enough for you to wish to switch schools? Maybe some language training programs of interest to you, internships in relevant companies, or a semester abroad that you can spend in Korea. Those are the kinds of familiarity with the university and course curriculum that can help to enhance your application.
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This is the version that I made changes, do you might to check it for me again? Thank you very much.
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Back in the days when I was still in Seattle Central College, I studied in Korean. However, since they do not provide Korean language in the college, I had a chance just applying Korean course in the University of Washington for two quarters. (...)
Those opportunities are helping me to get more chances to practice my Korean skills, and I have been doing a perfect job on it. In addition, the reason why I want to transfer to the University of Washington is because, I have a huge passion about learning Korean than learning Communication; and I have strong confidence that I will do perfect job in this major, as what I did before. Furthermore, since I had attended University of Washington before, I know there are more opportunities than UC Davis that I can enhance more experiences, having more chances to communicate with people who speak Korean. Communication is an interesting major to study; but, during the time I am studying in UC Davis, I am still having a big vision of being a translator one-day, not a public relation person.
After I graduate from university, I hope I could work in a place that needs perfect language skills. Like travel agency, or a translation agency. Since I love traveling, I hope during the time I am enjoying traveling, I can also serve my client nicely, make them have one of the best trip in their lives.
I have a personality is that once I decide to achieve a gold, I will do all my best to get the best result. Since I got a huge interest in Korean, I tried lots of different ways to learn Korean when I did not get the chance to have a Korean in-class lecture. For instant, I talked to my Korean roommate only in Korean every-day, I watched a lot of Korean drama but without looking at the subtitle; and because I love listening to Korean music, I tried translating the lyrics to Chinese, and then searched online to find out the errors that I made. Although I used my own method to learn Korean, but because of those hard-works I have done, my Korean skills are way better than others. Thus, I have 100 percent of confidence that I am all prepared for Korean major in this following Fall.
When I was still living in Seattle, UW was the dream school that I always want to study at. I hope to gain more knowledge and information about how Korean language was made, and more history background. From the experiences that I had before, I believe the University of Washington would let me develop more useful knowledge for future career. I wish I could be part of the campus that welcomes students from all ethnic backgrounds.
Holt Educational Consultant - / 14,801 4780 Lin, there is a discrepancy in your opening statement. You claim that you enrolled at Seattle Central College to study Korean. Then in the same paragraph, you also state that they do not teach Korean at that College so you moved studied Korean at UW for 2 semesters instead. Exactly how were you able to enroll in a non existent major at Seattle Central College then? That is a confusing statement. Think of what you want to say again and try to present it in a more understandable manner in that paragraph. Kindly review my previous advice again. You missed a number of important points that are required in the presentation of your essay. So far though, this is an improved version, but still a work in progress.
