kenyaboyfresh 7 / 17 Dec 10, 2011 #1Prompt: Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below.I love playing soccer; it has always been a part of my life. I fell in love with soccer in Kenya whenever my mother's high school class invited me to kick a ball with them. Whenever my family moved to America, I started playing in various recreational and competitive leagues and over time my skills improved. Although I had always been a forward, my high school coach decided to play me as a central midfielder. I was very unconfident whenever I realized that that my responsibility was to orchestrate our entire offensive attack. How could I, a forward, do this? As I started to gain experience, my confidence also increased and I in turn became a better midfielder. Looking back at my soccer days, I realize that without soccer, I wouldn't have good communication or teamwork skill, but most importantly, I wouldn't have my confidence.
maroon5 9 / 57 Dec 10, 2011 #2I fell in love with soccer in Kenya whenever my mother's high school---You should replace "whenever" with " ever since the time"Whenever my family moved to America---similarly replace "whenever" with "ever since"It's a good essay and i could relate to it a lot because i am soccer crazy...GOOD JOB AND GOOD LUCK