JJH 1 / 1 Aug 19, 2009 #1MIT short answer:We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. (*)(100 words or fewer)Despite frequent injuries, I always have a strong passion for the game of basketball. The pleasure from swishing the net is a remedy that dispels all my anxieties and purifies my mind. Even when I couldn't play basketball for months after a series of surgeries, I actively contributed to the online basketball society, where I've been a Hall Of Famer of a popular basketball community and an editor/administrator for HoopsVibe, one of the largest basketball news media. However, I refused to be paid for my job because basketball provides me satisfaction that I cannot find anywhere else in my life.
EF_Simone 2 / 1,986 Aug 19, 2009 #2Good job! Lively and to the point. One suggestion:...because basketball provides me satisfaction that I cannot find no where else in my life.
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491 Aug 19, 2009 #3Yeah, this is pretty solid already. One suggestion:"Despite frequent injuries related to the sport , I have always had a strong passion for the game of basketball. "
OP JJH 1 / 1 Aug 19, 2009 #4Thank you for the feedback. Do you guys think my third sentence is too long?
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491 Aug 19, 2009 #5No. If all of your sentences were that length, the essay would run into problems, but an occasional long sentence is fine.