"I think I'm in love with my radio, cause it never lets me down. And I fall in love with my stereo, whenever I hear that sound", words sang by Beyonce in her song "Radio". It's safe to say that I am in love with music. I love how there is a song for everything I have ever felt, such as heartbreak, happiness, loneliness, and a want for God. Sometimes, I just sit and listen to my music and let the rhythm and melodies hit me and take me away where my mp3 player is my best friend. I love how one song evokes memories, how another gets me ready for a track meet, and how Mary Mary's "Heaven" gets me excited for the future. Music became alive for me when I joined the Marching Band as a flute player and flag girl, where I got to march and dance to the beat of the music. I love the fact that I can sit down at the piano and teach myself how to play a song by ear. If only I could sing as good as I play. Consider this your warning, when I am really feeling a song don't be surprised if you hear me singing along, maybe you'll want to sing along with me! As my roommate, I hope you love music just as much as I do, if not, I would be happy to show you the many things I have learned by just listening to it.
i dont know what else to do. is it good???
only I could sing as good as I play----sing as WELL as you play, not as good
words sang by Beyonce in her song "Radio". It's safe to say that I am in love with music------change to-----These soulful lyrics by Beyonce embody my life and my love for music.
song don't be surprised if you hear me singing along, ----completely a stylistic edit but u could change to ...song don't be surprised if you see me jamming with a hairbrush
it was cute, but needs work, it got better when u started talking about music ni other aspects like the marching band
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Your passion for music is really evident, but perhaps you might discuss more things with your future roommate? quirks, habits, what makes you you on an everyday scale? I feel like your love of music probably has come up some where else in your app (given the extracurriculars you mention) and this is a chance to show the reviewer something that won't be anywhere else :) very well written though! caught my attention. I'm writing the same thing actually, read mine in return? :)
I don't want to let you down your essay overall is pretty good, but if I were you I would not insert words from a song or a quote in my essay because they don't want to hear from anyone accept you "the applicant".
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