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Sport field, hall, swimming pool - most schools nowadays already have their own sport facilities


Shahrul 1 / -  
Dec 31, 2014   #1
Some people claim that school nowadays does not focus on sport activities as the part of the school curriculum. Others, however, said it is untrue.

It is obvious that most of the school nowadays already have their own sport facilities. For example, sport field, sport hall, and some schools even provide a swimming pool for their student. Moreover, the government policy in education stated that for those who want to establish a private school, they have to ensure the sport venue and sport activities must not be ignored.

Nevertheless, the current trend nowadays, student is frequently accounted merely based on academic qualification as it is an epidemic called 'exam-oriented'. A good example would be students are forced to attend extra classes and are burdened with unprecedented homework. As the result, they have not enough time to do healthy activities after the school period.

Even though many schools have established the best sport facilities for their student, it means nothing without sport programs. Moreover, there are a few schools hiring these facilities to the public in order to get additional profit. In an extreme case, many sport venues are scarified for the development purpose to cope with the number of students which increase slightly year by year.

In a nutshell, I strongly agree that sport activities are not being made as the priority as it should in the school. Thus, the government, teachers and parents must take part proactively to tackle this challenge and to find a viable solution to all parties.

noemiq 2 / 5 1  
Dec 31, 2014   #2
I am not sure what your prompt is asking. Is it a simple agree or disagree? Is there a word limit?

There is a lot of work to be done in your grammar. My corrections will be in bold

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Nevertheless, the current trend nowadays, a? student is frequently accounted merely based on academic qualification.as it is an epidemic epidemic in what? where can we see this "epedemic"? called 'exam-oriented'. A good example would beis when students are forced to attend extra classes and are burdened with unprecedented amounts of homework What does this "example" have to do with the accounting of students? Connect the dots. As the result, they have not enough time to do healthy activities after the school period.

Even though many schools have established the best sport facilities for their students, it means nothing without sport programs. Moreover, there are a few this phrase makes the audience doubt your credibility. Either mention how many schools, which schools or do not mention this phrase at all. schools hiring these facilities to the public in order to get additional profit. In an extreme case, many sport venues are scarified I hope this is a typo for the development purpose to cope with the number of students which increase slightly year by year rephrase this .

In a nutshell, I strongly agree that sport activities are not being made as thein thepriority as itthey should be in the schools. Thus, the government, teachers and parents must take part proactively to tackle this challenge and to find a viable solution to all parties. I would spend more time discussing the possible solutions - depending on your prompt of course.


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