"...a typed short essay (2 pages double spaced) outlining your interests and motivations for participating in sport. In the essay indicate whether any one person has had a significant impact on your participation. If so, who, and what has been the nature on that impact? What are your personal goals?"
I have witnessed first hand the impact of participation in sport and the positive influences from mentors, leaders and peers. For me, participating in sport is one constructive way to improve myself. Also, because of sports I have found several important role models, most importantly my father. Lastly, participating in sports has taught me to set goals and learn to follow through on them.
My reasons for participating for sport, I believe, show the character and determination needed to become successful in whatever field I may choose to pursue. To begin, partaking in sports can be a great test of personal endurance, both physical and mental. Learning to adapt your body, technique or execution in any sport oftentimes will take mental strength and dedication. Secondly, by competing against others or with yourself and having a set of goals to work towards, sport may become's more than just a game. It becomes a lifestyle. Constantly working towards exceeding my individual expectations allows me to know exactly what I am working for. Setting goals that commit myself to excellence allows me to live to my fullest potential. Lastly, I believe that participating in sports allows me to learn lessons that have strong importance in everyday living. I have found that participation in sports, especially team oriented sports results in the progress of qualities such as leadership, self discipline, work ethic, confidence and accountability. These traits are also all exuded by my father, who has had an immense impact on my will to participate in sport.
My father, (dads name) is someone who has been a positive role model in my athletic decisions and participations. He sets great example for others by being an active member of the community which is seen in his volunteer coaching work. Within the community he dedicates many hours to coaching several different football teams and helping the Catholic Youth Organization by convening basketball games during tournaments as well as more volunteer coaching work. His example has given me a successful course to follow. His hard work and devotion have lead to me joining him in his volunteer work as a coach. Lastly, my father has always had an impact on every important decision I have ever made. He has been there without hesitation, always offering an informed second opinion to my situations. This applies to not only my participation in sports, but every other single aspect of my life which is why his judgment is so important to me. By setting a positive example he has challenged me to set difficult goals for myself.
I have plenty of personal goals that I have set for myself. Starting with short term goals, I would like to finish my active high school career strongly with good grades. Also, I would like to stay healthy and active by continuing my exercise habits and work ethic. In addition, my long term goals include objectives such as being accepted to and graduating from a University program I am interested in, becoming successful at a profession I thoroughly enjoy and continue to represent myself well in all facets of my life. I believe that my ultimate goal would to be able to have a career that I enjoy, that permits me to pursue goals in other aspects of my life. For example, if I were to become a high school teacher, it would allow me to volunteer within a community to do something I love, which is being around sports. With my volunteer experience within the (local sports organization), I have found that even at my relatively young age, I enjoy coaching. Simply put, I would rather have a career I'm passionate about where I barely get by, than have a career I despise and make more money. This is what is important to me.
In conclusion, I believe that sports have a much stronger influence on Canadian society than just games. They are a method to improve ones life, a way to find commendable role model and a process to learn about setting goals and planning ones future. I fully believe that sports have modeled my life and I am a better person because of it.
Looking for some editting and any tips for improving my essay. All help is greatly appreciated!!!
You tell a lot, and show little. If you were to rewrite the essay so that you showed more, and told less, it would be much better. Have you participated in any sports yourself? If so, which ones? What, specifically, have you learned from doing so? Can you show us this through the relating of interesting anecdotes?
first-hand
My reasons for participating in sports , I believe, reflect the character and determination that will enable me to become successful in whatever field I may choose to pursue. Well this sentence makes it sound like you, personally, have very impressive reasons for participating in sports -- for example, if you struggled with sports as a child and continued to participate in order to surmount adversity. Maybe you can change the sentence to say:
My reason for participating for sports is that I believe in spirited training and competition as the character-building processes that are necessary for becoming successful in whatever field I may choose to pursue.
No need for Dad's name; irrelevant to the essay... My father (dads name) is someone who has been a positive role model in ...
Actually, you can tighten that up even more:
My father (dads name) is someone who has been a positive role model in ...
Less is more! Strive for rhythm and efficiency.
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to improve one's life...
