If you had the opportunity to spend one day in New York City with a famous New Yorker, who would it be and what would you do?
Her name may stir images of Big Ben, but Stacy London is one of New York City's most prominent fashion icons. While capturing the hearts of millions with her TLC show What Not to Wear, she instills confidence in men and women across the nation. Her great insight into the world of style and philanthropic motives would make for excellent conversation and an exciting trip to Fifth Avenue. With the bonus of an improved wardrobe, Stacy can help me feel confident in my own skin.
I just feel like it's...off. What can I do to make it better??
well first off, it needs to be more about how you two spend the day together rather than giving background info on her. It's good she inspires you so use that inspiration to take you down to one of her boutiques or stores to give yourself a makeover or have fun giving her one. Be creative!
Could you take a look at my commonapp essay? it's kinda long but theres two that I need to decide between. any critism will be appreciated thanks!
I went through and changed most of it. Here it is:
Her name may stir images of Big Ben, but Stacy London is one of New York City's most prominent fashion icons. Strutting down the streets of New York City, Stacy introduces me to the city's best kept secrets. With every "Shut the front door!" she leads me to style success. We then put my lessons to work by giving a double-mastectomy survivor the makeover she deserves. After a long day, we sit down to chai tea while I direct her away from that grey streak and she fills me in on everything style.
Please, please, please leave any criticism that you have!
NYU Supplement -- 2050 Movie and Famous New Yorker. PLEASE HELP
Any help at all would be appreciated. Any kind of criticism at all will be helpful! Thank you in advance!!
If you had the opportunity to spend one day in New York City with a famous New Yorker, who would it be and what would you do?
Her name may stir images of Big Ben, but Stacy London is one of New York City's most prominent fashion icons. Strutting down the streets of New York City, Stacy introduces me to the city's best kept secrets. With every "Shut the front door!" she leads me to style success. After shopping on Fifth Avenue, we bond over chai tea at a quirky coffee shop in Manhattan, simply enjoying each other's company. For a woman who frequently shouts, "Shut up!" Stacy makes great conversation.
In the year 2050, a movie is being made of your life. Please tell us the name of your movie and briefly summarize the story line.
Lo Hecho Está Hecho -- Life seems ideal for UN language interpreter [my name]. He has a doting wife, four great children, and a beautiful home in Barcelona. Unexpectedly, his estranged father is diagnosed with cancer. In a final attempt to fix the broken relationship, the forty-year-old linguist will put his skills to the test on a world trip with his passing father. On this journey full of trials and tribulations, [my name] will discover that self-forgiveness is the greatest liberation of all.
***"Lo Hecho Está Hecho" translates to "What's Done Is Done"
I like your first prompt. It's very concise and to the point.
For your second prompt, maybe I'm just looking into it too much, but I think this sentence "In a final attempt to fix the broken relationship, the forty-year-old linguist will put his skills to the test on a world trip with his passing father." is a little unclear. You're skills as a linguist will help mend the ties with your father?
