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Stanford/Common App Short Answer; 'I started playing soccer at the age of six'

bmachado 5 / 23  
Oct 28, 2009   #1
These are my responses to some of the short answer questions. Last week my counselor told me that I should try and apply EA to Stanford, so I have been rushing to get all of the writing assignments done and I am sure they are not as good as they could be if I had more time. Any help I can get with regard to my essays would be wonderful.

***In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities. (< 150 words)

From the time I started playing soccer at the age of six, it has been a big part of my life-- especially in high school. My high school soccer career began on JV, but as a freshman I was promoted to Varsity goalkeeper just before the start of league play. Adding to the apprehension I already felt about playing my first Varsity game was the fact that the school we were up against had been league champions for the past several years and had demolished our team every time we had played them. After going into four overtimes, our match against them ended scoreless. Though it finished in a tie, that game is one of my proudest moments. I, the little freshman goalie, had shutout the best team in the league. At the end of that season, after much hard work and perseverance, we won our first ever league championship.

***Tell us what makes Stanford a good place for you. (> 250 words)

This past summer I was fortunate enough to participate in the Discover Stanford program. While I was walking around the campus, I realized that it felt very natural to me. I did not feel like I was walking around some nameless, generic college-- I felt like I was walking around my own home. Stanford just felt right to me. I could see myself strolling through the Main Quad, attending services at the Memorial Church, playing soccer for Stanford in the stadium (I can dream can't I?). Though I had only been at Stanford for a few hours, it felt like I had lived there my entire life! As if Stanford's beautiful campus was not reason enough for me to want to attend, learning about the academic opportunities offered at Stanford just sweetened the deal.

I was very impressed when I heard about the dedication Stanford has to making sure their students are successful. It was very comforting to me to know that Stanford would offer me all the help I needed to ensure my academic success. Upon further inquiry, I found that apart from being one of the best schools around, Stanford is very highly regarded in my intended major of political science. The diversity found on the campus and Stanford's dedication to promoting different cultures and beliefs as well as the plethora of clubs and activities were other qualities that I also found very appealing. After learning so much about Stanford and all it has to offer, I am left with only one question: if I want the best educational experience I can receive, why would I not go to Stanford?
EF_Stephen - / 264  
Oct 28, 2009   #2
Both of these are very well-written. You've answered the prompts, and you have done so clearly and directly. The vocab is appropriate, and you haven't made yourself sound like the greatest thing to ever come out of high school.

One thing you might do is explain your interest in political science. That's the only flaw I see.
OP bmachado 5 / 23  
Oct 29, 2009   #3
thank you. I plan on getting more into political science in my essay on what I find intellectually engaging. I am going to try to get that one done today and post it.

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